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Ielts task 1 : the number of animals with tha amount of rainfall



Apsari 7 / 13  
Apr 16, 2014   #1
hello guys, we meet again in my task I. Please give advice in my writing Task I because I still confused about How to read the graphs and write in essay.

Thanks a lot guys :)

The charts below show information about animals and rainfall at the Nbro Nature Reserve.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

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The graphs compare the number of zebras and buffaloes with the amount of rainfall in Nboro Nature Reserve between 2005 and 2011. It can be clearly seen that how many zebras and buffaloes live did not correlate with how much the rain fell.

In 2005, there were number of 50 zebras and 40 buffaloes. Zebras and buffaloes increased to just under 80 zebras and 80 buffaloes in 2007. But in 2009, zebras decreased to about 70 zebras from 2007 and buffaloes increased to 80 buffaloes. In 2011, the animals went up to just over 80 zebras and 120 buffaloes. The other graphs showed how much the rain fell in 4 periods. In 2005, the rainfall was 600 millimeters. In 2007, the rainfall climbed up to about 1100 millimeters but in 2009 the rainfall went down to above 600 millimeters. In 2011, the rainfall increased to 1200 millimeters.

Overall, the number of both animals have increased in four-year period. The numbers of both animals did not correlate with the amount of rain over 4-year period in Nbro Nature Reserve.

dumi 1 / 6793  
Apr 16, 2014   #2
Where is your graph? Upload it using the Attach file(s) feature in the Message block.
When you upload the graph, I will provide you with more feedbacks :)
eddies [Contributor] 25 / 1170  
Apr 16, 2014   #3
As per the basic rule, a paragraph is a collection of related sentences dealing with a single topic.
You have one idea and several bits of supporting evidence within a single paragraph.

Coherence within a paragraph is crucial to IELTS writing. Why?
Shokhusrav 10 / 26  
Apr 16, 2014   #4
Hi, Apsari. Can you tell me where you find this task? I'll try to attach it
eddies [Contributor] 25 / 1170  
Apr 17, 2014   #5
A few notes from the bodies:
Grouping data together where there are patterns is a vital key to have a succinct explanation of body paragraphs .
Pahan 1 / 1824  
Apr 17, 2014   #6
Hey, upload the graph using the Attach file(S) feature in the Message block :)
Without seeing that it is difficult for us to give you more meaningful comments :(
In 2005, there were number of 50 zebras and 40 buffaloes.

Zebras and buffaloes increased to just under 80 zebras and 80 buffaloes in 2007.

In the year 2007, they increased in their numbers to be just below 80 zebras and 80 buffaloes


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