The number of books that were borrowed and its Book types [IELTS Writing Task 1]

Question:
The line graph shows the number of books that were borrowed in four different months in 2014 from four village libraries, and the pie chart shows the percentage of books, by type, that were borrowed over this time.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

My essay:

The total of books were borrowed from four different village libraries between june and september 2014 is depicted in line graph, and the kind of borrowed books is showed in pie chart which measured in percent. Overall, Although Ryeslip experienced a decline in the number of borrowed books, three other village libraries increased, and it was dominated by fiction books.

At first glance, books borrowed from west Eaton and Church Mount libraries showed similar patterns, with both increased gradually till 150 books in September. Then, although Sutton wood libraries remained a fluctuation before, between August and September it re-increased and peaked at 300 books. However, Ryeslip libraries had a decrease in the total of borrowed books from 300 books to 175 books during a period of four months.

On the other hand, fiction book was the most popular borrowed books compared to self-help, history, science and biography books which stood at 43%, while rest of books just were interested in under 20%.

To sum up, three different village libraries had a rise in the total of borrowed books whilst rest of library decreased, and fiction type was the most read book by people in those areas over the given frame period.

Hi Sari, first of all when you post an analysis, you have to make sure that the graph or the diagram that represents the information that you are about to analyze, this way the reviewers will be able to make sure that they are delivering the most accurate and credible feedback that is necessary to your revision.

Anyhow, I would like to edit and provide you corrections that will enhance your analysis and that is according to the proper usage of the English language.

- is depicted in the line graph,
- showed in the pie chart which is measured in percentage .

- At firsta glance, books borrowed
- with both increased gradually increasing
- tillto 150 books in September.
- remained at a fluctuation rate before,
- re-increasedbounced back and peaked at 300 books.

- To sum upOverall , three different village
- whilst rest of the library decreased,
- the given frame period.

There you have it Sari, I hope the above remarks are helpful to your revision and for future writing reference, mind the linking verbs and their proper placement in the essay.