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IELTS WRITING TASK 1 : The Number of Books Read by Different Genders At Burnay Public LIbrary


andrisaputra3 1 / 2  
Dec 11, 2015   #1
Hello guys. I am a new bee in IELTS writing task 1. Right now I'm still learning how to write an introduction paragraph of writing IELTS task 1.

The line graph gives information about how many books read by male and female at Burnary Public Library over four-year period as indicated on the x-axis. The y-axis shows the number of books read from 2000 books to 16000 books. According to the legend for men is described by the green line and for men a blue one.

ainirere /  
Dec 11, 2015   #2
The line graph gives information about how many books read by male and female at Burnary Public Library over four-year period (in four years) as indicated on the x-axis. The y-axis shows the number of books read from 2000 books to 16000 books. According to the legend for men is described by the green line and for men a blue one.

Hi Andri, please attached the image of your writing, so people could give feedback your writing easily.
My suggestion for make an effective introduction is you should describe one or two sentences that introduce the graphs briefly.
eddies [Contributor] 25 / 1,208 476  
Dec 11, 2015   #3
You need to include the pict. It take some time to grasp your notion with no pict attached.

Well, when it comes to an IELTS task 1 introductory paragraph, I strongly suggest for both EF members and my IELTS students in English Studio, Kampung Inggris Pare, Indonesia to construct their sentences in passive forms. I tell you this since you are tested in how good you deal with such sentences in IELTS task 1. This will be a plus if it is added a 2-sentence overview. A closer look at the sample below regarding the picture attached;

A breakdown of the figures for males and females reading books at Burnaby Public Library over the period in question, from 2011 to 2014 is presented in the line graph. Overall, it can be seen obviously that a gap between the figures had narrowed down. Initially, more males read books, while the converse would appear to be true for females' figure after overtaking the former one .

hope this helps :D
- eddy suaib





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