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The number of hybrid vehicle sales of Japan and other countries rose considerably every year - IELTS



pertiwi02 11 / 8  
Jan 8, 2016   #1
IELTS TASK 1 : GLOBAL HYBRID VEHICLE SALES

The bar chart illustrates the figure of the universal sale of hybrid transportation using fuel and electricity in three different categories: Japan, US and other countries from 2006 and 2009.

Overall, the number of hybrid vehicle sales of Japan and other countries rose considerably every year, while the reverse was showed by US.

In 2006, the total number of vehicle sales in Japan and other countries stood at 250,000. Interestingly, there was a significant rise in the number of Japan's vehicles, the highest sales between US and other countries by more than 300,000 in 2009. Furthermore, other countries sales also increased sharply around 100,000 sales in 2009.

On the other hand, the number of US's vehicle stood at 250,000 sales in 2006 and peaked at 350,000 sales in 2007, the highest number of vehicle sales between 2006 and 2009. Then, it decreased sharply until the last year around less than 300,000 sales. In addition, the total number of three different group increased from 360,000 to 740.000 sales.


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aflah15 32 / 18  
Jan 8, 2016   #2
...in three different categories: Japan, US and other countries from 2006 andto 2009...
...the total number of three different groups increased from 360,000 to 740.000 sales...
I suggest for you to apply the range of vocabularies, it will be better if you use more various words. Another advice is you do not explain the detail information of trade in Japan and other countries from 2007 to 2008, while you describe clearly about US' selling.


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