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The number of travellers using three major airports in New York City between 1995 and 2000.



aniani 20 / 19  
Nov 21, 2015   #1
A breakdown of the figure for aircraft passengers flying from three major airports in Newyork measured in millions if passengers per year from 1995 to 2000, a five-year period is shown in the bar chart. Overall, it can be seen that during the period, most of people were keen on starting their journey from LaGuardia airport. While 1997 saw John F. Kennedy airport as the favorite airport.

There was an increase in the number of airport visitors of Newark and LaGuardia airport. The significant alteration was noted in LaGuardia's attendees. While it stood at 35, then in 2000, it increased dramatically to more than twice compared to the first year. Moreover, the number of passengers from Newark airport experienced a sharp rise in the first two years, but it continued to grow steadily at 40 travelers in 1997 onwoards.

On the other hand, there was a fluctuation pattern in the figure for John F. Kennedy's visitors. Whereas it had the highest point at almost 50 in 1997. However, the number continued to fluctuated in the next 3 years, and ended up at approximately 43 in the last year.


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vangiespen - / 4077  
Nov 22, 2015   #2
Ani, Bayu is right, you forgot to mention the graph numbers in your essay so this will be an immediate failure in the actual test. You did not present accurate and correct information in your essay. You only summarized the overall report without offering figures so the report credibility now comes into question. In order to write credible reports, you always need to refer to your data that is composed of facts and figures. With that warning issued to you, I'll try to help you address the existing problems of your essay, sans the accurate figures of your essay.


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