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Travelers using three major airports in New York City (writing task 1)


Niam01 6 / 7 2  
Jan 21, 2016   #1
The chart below shows the number of travelers using three major airports in New York City between 1995 and 2000

A breakdown of the number of tourist who visit to New York City through three particular airports over a half decade, from 1995 to 2000, measured in million passengers a year is showed in bar chart. Overall, it is important note that there was a dramatic fluctuation in the number of visitor via John F. Kennedy. While both of LaGuardia and Newark experienced upward trend, LaGuardia was the highest visitor in the end of period.

To begin, in 1995, the figure of traveler at John F. Kennedy reached around 28 million passengers followed by a gradual increase by approximately 20 million passengers over 2 years. The number then decreased gradually to just over 30 in 1999 and there was a slight increase by 12 million passengers in 2000. In contrast, Newark airport had the smallest visitor in 1995, at about 15 millions. However, there was a large growth after during three years, at more than 40 millions. Following this the figure remained stable until in the end of period.

On the other hand, LaGuardia started at around 35 million passengers in 1995. Afterward, this trend rose markedly during 4 years at 50 million passengers followed by a dramatic increase in 2000 at less than 70 millions, become the greatest number visitor of three airport others.




vangiespen - / 4,137 1449  
Jan 21, 2016   #2
You have a very good grasp of the bar chart and you have an obvious semi-advanced grasp of how to use the written English language. These factors, when combined will make your final score in the actual test, when based upon your performance in this essay, fall at a bracket of higher than average. I don't think you have much to worry about when it comes to the actual tests. Constant practice on your part will further ensure the highest possible score for you.

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