restriction of freedom of action
reword this. For example: "...limits freedom"
I will be presenting information that will help to support my opinion
it is always a good idea to write a blueprint. Just, in a few words, mention the reasons why you have this particular opinion. This way you can connect the introduction to the body and the reader will know what he/she is going to read.
the public areaplaces
such as bars and restaurants
these are not private places? are they?
as these places are privately managed by its executives
No, this sentence is irrational. You cannot name such places as "private" places. They are private businesses, but still public.