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Toefl essay : One thing representing your country to an international exhibition



little_wingg 3 / 2  
Jan 28, 2011   #1
Please give me some suggestion or feedback to improve my writing. Thank you in advance.

My country, Thailand, is blessed with abundant natural resources and local products. Thailand is famous for rice, elephants, Thai silk, Thai cuisine, Thai boxing, beautiful beaches, culture, art and so on. Among these, I would choose Thai cuisine to represent my country. Obviously, Thai food is known as not only spicy but also balance of fundamental taste. Thai food also shows good combination of culture and art. Moreover, food is the best way to draw attention from people who come to the exhibition because they can taste and smell it.

Thai food is unique and delicious. Most Thai food is prepared from herbs and spices. Herbal and spice ingredients in each dish helps balance the taste of food: sweet, sour, salty, spicy and bitter. Thai main dishes serve with rice meaning that the main dishes must have rich taste in order to be tasty when eat with rice. The balance and rich of taste and the perfect blended of herbs and spices make Thai food differed from others which must be interesting to international audiences.

The appearance of authentic Thai food is usually magnificent and colorful. For the example, Thai curries are called by color like red curry, green curry, orange curry and yellow curry. On top of those curries, they are often covered by cilantro, spring onion or peanut. Moreover, Thai carved fruit and vegetable will be serve together to decorate and make the food more attractive. The design of carved fruit and vegetable is different from region to region which symbolizes the art and culture in form of food.

The smell of food in an international exhibition will catch audience's attention. In case that the audience tastes the food, they can enjoy and feel a part of culture, art and lifestyle at that time which is a great way to represent my country. Moreover, there are a number of Thai restaurants located around the world. This might help promote Thai restaurant business as well.

Western people always greet by say hello and ask "How are you?" but Thai always ask "Have you already had a meal?" instead of "How are you?" which means that Thai concern a lot about eating and food. Unsurprisingly, Thailand becomes famous on food. From my point of view, presenting Thai food will be a significant way to represent my country.

sharkondiet 3 / 22  
Jan 30, 2011   #2
Hi, little_wingg
Here are some of my suggestions:

The design of carved fruit and vegetable is different from region to region which symbolizes the art and culture in form of food.

How about " Thailand culture is embedded in the design of carved fruit and vegetable, which differs from region to region."?

The balance and rich of taste and the perfect blended of herbs and spices make Thai food differed from others which must be interesting to international audiences.

"Thai food is distinguished for its balance and perfect blend of herbs and spices, which will offer an unforgettable experience to international audiences. " I'm not certain about what you mean "the rich of taste" here. Do you wanna imply that Thai food tastes vary in a wide range?

PS: I love Thai hotpot. Really! :D
yecochi 4 / 5  
Jan 31, 2011   #3
Hi, little_wingg

"rich of taste"
Do you mean "Various kinds of flavors"?
How about replacing it with "Plentiful flavors" ?


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