In order to improve a country's education system.... criticize teachers?

In order to improve a country's education system, young students should be allowed to openly criticize their teachers during class time. What is your opinion? What are some other ways education systems could be improved?

how to improve teaching methods

This is my essay:
There is no doubt that education system has an important role in the development of a country, hence, it should be kept improving. Receiving feedback from students is one of the best way to enhance the education system. However, I am against the idea that young students should be allowed to openly criticize their teachers during the class time. This could lead to unwanted consequences and we should consider other way to transform the classroom environment for the better result.

First of all, allowing children to criticize their teacher in the class might affect the quality of the lesson. For example, criticism from the students might take considerable time for studying and learning objectives of that lesson might not be reached in such limited time. Other students who might not be interested in the subject would lose their attention for the lesson. Hence, this notion though innovative but not very much applicable in a normal classroom.

Besides, in order to improve the quality of education system, we could extend the time of a normal lesson. This time should be used only to receive students opinions and queries, either in the means of feedback form or conversation. This way, the teacher would be able to understand the students confusion and response immediately or privately if necessary. This solution would give students a chance to raise their voice without wasting the time of the class.

In conclusion, letting the teachers be freely critisized is not an effective way to improve teaching. Instead, we should have a separate time right after the lesson for students to raise their opinions. I believe this is a way to ensure the amount of knowledge taken in in a lesson and still, improve the education system.

In introduction, i think there are 2 basic parts. They are background statement and thesis statement. The background statement should be have the same meaning as the statement given by ielts. Do not copy the ielts statement, you need to paraphrase it to use different language with the same meaning. For example ielts says " the best way" , you should say " the most efective methods". You don't need to change the word fully. " improve" can be " improving", just keep the word and change its form.

Gian, when writing the prompt paraphrase, you must never repeat any word or phrase from the original. So, rather than saying " students should be allowed to openly criticize their teachers during the class time", you should have indicated; "class time should not be used to point out problems with the teaching method of an educator" or something similar. Change the whole presentation of the fact, don't just change a small portion, that is how you will lose points because it will appear that you are not capable of expressing yourself in English in a manner that is similar to the original. That similar to the original is the whole point of the opening paraphrase. That is how the extent of your English vocabulary is first tested and in this case, you did not do a very good job at proving you have a good lexical resource for synonym words.

Let me be clear though, your essay is still strong. Though faulty in terms of grammar and sentence structure, you were able to get your message across to the reader without causing too much confusion. You were still easily understood so you should get a decent, but maybe not very high, score for the GRA section. your C&C needs some work in terms of working in the transition sentences. If you can develop transition sentences between paragraphs, then your essay will be considered more cohesive in presentation though a bit problematic in terms of coherence.