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ghafarimahsa 15 / 41  
Jul 21, 2011   #1
Dear friends, please help me to paraphrasing some general sentences in different manners and tell me some better synonyms in this essay. Thanks in advance.

"Originality does not mean thinking something that was never thought before; it means putting old ideas together in new way." (It's a GRE issue)

The author points out a new definition of originality. He states, although many people believe that originality is considering something that was never thought before, it means collecting ideas in new way. I strongly accede to this assertion that originality is not only gaining a new result, but also creating a new method and the way of thinking can be called originality too. Nowadays, the world around us needs more creative ideas to improve, and the first step in this process is announcing a define definition of originality to the world, which shows all critical aspects effect on it. In fact, two examples give support to my favorable attitude towards the subject, are mentioned below.

First and foremost, in the scientific area, Newton is one the best examples of a creative man. Many years ago, when Newton was alive, people had a different idea of researching. They were looking for the exceptions, and most of the aroused questions were about the reason of exceptions in the world like eclipse, earthquake and so forth. Scientists were not curious about basis reason of an issue. All their energies were put only in justifying the phenomena. In a case of need, they were not able to prove, relating the phenomena to magic and superstitions were prevalent. On that time, Newton was sitting under a tree, when suddenly an apple dropped on his head. The question of why this apple dropped was born. As a result, many fundamental laws of dynamics discovered and now the rudimentary question well-known as a turning point in the world. The most important specification of Newton was his novel attitude. He tried to prove simplest rule of nature, not paying attention only on exceptions. Then, when scientists faced with problems, they looked back on the initial assumptions and theories and tried to revise them.

Another example is about a famous cardiologist, Michael Fox, who is well-known due to his combination theories in medicine. In 1914, he was graduated as a mechanical engineer from Imperial College London. As far as, he was not interested in his major, he made a decision to further his education in medicine. At that time, a common problem among cardiologist was blood clotting disorder in heart valve replaced patient. At the first time, this surgery was done by implanting a pig's heart valve for a patient, but this valve could be used longer than one year, and then it would be rejected. Another proposed solution was using artificial valves, which could only postpone the death to more than one year after replacement. To settle this problem, Fox proposed a new design of valve that was using in evaporating machines. He did not invent a new device, he just utilized a trustworthy valve in medicine, but his proposal became a revolution in cardiovascular system. After a while, biomechanics, an interdisciplinary major, was introduced to the world. This example shows that just by looking around more precisely and combining old devices lead to cheerful invention.

To sum up, I strongly believe that originality is not only creating new thing, but also collecting old theories in new ways. Besides, revising and restating previous theories show us more practical aspects in modern technology.
RChodavadia 2 / 5  
Jul 21, 2011   #2
"accede" - Try saying "concede" ; It fits better in my opinion

"a define definition" - Try saying "a precise definition"

In my opinion, I don't think you should say "to sum up", try thinking of a creative way to make it flow

Just my suggestions, otherwise great essay, and keep up the good work!
OP ghafarimahsa 15 / 41  
Jul 22, 2011   #3
Ravin,
I really appraciate you suggestions, all you mentined are right.
At the end paragragh, I always use "To sum up" or "In a conclusion". I would be so grateful if you could make an example

Thanks my friend
bimala73 4 / 11  
Jul 22, 2011   #4
Hi : I read your essay on Orginality. The way you have started the essay is superb, but some how not convinced on how you have presented Newton's discovery of gravitational force by seeing the apple falling from the tree. How can you say that without thinking Newton's discovered the existing law of nature. Also the your explanation about exceptions does not fit here. However the second example is very good. You have used very strong words which is good, but always make sure that word should fit to the sentence. e.g. basis reason of the issue, cheerful invention etc does not sound good. Also if you are prpearing for GRE, make sure that you are using right word at right place, GRE final readers always welcome simple words rather than words wrongly used. This is all my sincere suggestions. I have also written on the same topic but opposite to your opinion. Kindly give sincere feedback.. Thanks...
OP ghafarimahsa 15 / 41  
Jul 23, 2011   #5
Bimala,
Thanks for your valuable suggestion.
Yes, you are right. The Newton paragragh does not make sense enough.
Although it is not a reasonable example, I wanted to show that the way Newton thought was different from people have lived at that time.
EF_Kevin 8 / 13,321 129  
Jul 23, 2011   #6
Here is a good rule to follow:
When writing about complex subjects, make sentences simple.

Scientists were not curious about basis reason of an issue. Here, you are writing about a complex subject, and the sentence's meaning is unclear. Scientists were not interested in challenging their existing ideas. All their energies were put only in justifying the phenomena based on what they already believed.

In a case of need, ???

They were not able to explain some phenomena, and the practice of relating the phenomena to magic and superstitions was prevalent. On At that time, Newton was...

This is a great sentence:
Another example is about a famous cardiologist, Michael Fox, who is well-known due to his combination theories in medicine.

After a while, biomechanics, an interdisciplinary major, was introduced to the world. This example shows that, just by looking around more precisely and combining old devices, one can achieve meaningful innovation.

:-)
EF_Kevin 8 / 13,321 129  
Jul 23, 2011   #7
Although it is not a reasonable example, I wanted to show that the way Newton thought was different from people have lived at that time.

To make it work in the essay, explain how Newton combined existing ideas to create new ones.
OP ghafarimahsa 15 / 41  
Jul 23, 2011   #8
100000000000000000000 Thanks Kevin, your suggestions are the best...


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