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Overall, it's clear that the unemployment rate in the US dropped from 7% to around 5% (1993 - 1999)


bayratak 2 / 4  
Sep 29, 2014   #1
You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

The graph below shows the unemployment rates in the US and Japan between March 1993 and March 1999.

Write a short report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.

You should write at least 150 words.


The line chart compares the level of unemployment in the US and Japan over a period of 6 years.

Overall, it's clear that the unemployment rate in the US dropped from 7% to around 5% between 1993 and 1999 while the ratio of Japanese people in workforce but without an employment to all workfoce doubled during the same period.

. According to the chart, there was a decrease in unemployment figure by around 1,5% in the US during March 1993 and March 1996. Despite the plateau periods between 1994 and 1995, the rate of unemployment rose from 2,5% to over 4% over a period of 3 years.

On the other hand, there was a significant decrease in the percentage of unemployed people in the US between 1996 abd 1988 by %1 and thereafter, the figure stood over %4.75 during the following years. Over the same period, the level of unemployment increased from well over 4% to %5 in Japan even though the figure tended to decrease slightly in 1996 and 1998.

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hsamadii 3 / 6 1  
Sep 29, 2014   #2
Most of your writing was about US. However, you were suppose to write about both of them.
"there was a significant decrease in the percentage of unemployed people in the US between 1996 and 1988 by %1" on my opinion 1% is not a significant decrease.

" Despite the plateau periods between 1994 and 1995" There is no plateau in that period.
tiaDS 73 / 235 52  
Sep 29, 2014   #3
The line chart compares illustrates the level of unemployment lines in the USUnited States and Japan over a period of 6 years, between 1993 and 1999 . It is measured in percent.

The line chart illustrates the proportion of workforce which indicates the idleness rates in America and Japan over a period of 6 years from 1993 to 1999 and is measured in percent.

I have had a long discussion on my study with my teacher. "compare" is not appropriate used when the picture provides time duration so it means that you have to use "language of change" and "language of compare." In any case, I suggest you to rephrase the prompt don't use the same word between introduction and the question. Overall, this is well-structured essay task 1.


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