Parents are the best teachers; 'they play vital role on children's education'

Traditionally, speaking of being the best teacher, most of people directly think the person must possess professional knowledge, academy and specialty as well as teach at the school. However, the conservative concept ignores that sometimes parents who raise children are the best teacher as well.

Indeed, the school teachers usually accept the college-trained and professional education to become the experts on their research or specialty fields so that most of people regard the school's teachers as the highly qualified intellectuals. In addition, most of parents believe that the highly educated teachers can teach the knowledge to the children and hope their children can be the highly intellectual one day.

However, the rich insights' school teachers easily overlook each student's behavior and personality which may influence students their own learning like distraction because there are so many students in the class that teachers can't take care or notice each child anytime. For this problem, parents play an important role in the process of children learning. First, the teachers don't understand each child's personality so much as parents do so that parents can find more suitable approach to teach and modify their children's deviation behavior patiently. What's more, parents can teach children anytime and anywhere like informal (accidental) learning and giving kinds of lessons by their lives.

In conclusion, although teachers can teach their professions, without modifying students' deviation behavior in time is in vain. Thus, parents plays a vital role on children's education. That's why I agree that parents are the best teacher.

Firstly, you should write the prompt of this essay! :agree or disagree? own opinion?

Secondly, you should pay attention to the usage of articles.

I am with Abdurasul. Prompt is important for us to identify what is require. Also, it is easier for us to identify and give you advices.

tooo looong, giving more work to the readers as they needs to memorize things. Possible solution: Break it into two sentences or more.


Also, Too loooong. Reduce the length of your sentences a bit more

avoid contraction in formal writing.

In addition to the structural improvements we suggested you (both I and Pahan) I thought of making a few more comments on your writing;
Let's take this sentence -


.... this sentence is not conveying a clear idea to the reader as it is cramped up with too many words and ideas. Write sentences shorter, one sentence per idea to enhance the effect of your writing. Clarity in your writing is the most important thing when it comes to writing.

Noteworthy:
1. The first thing the reader sees is your layout, which shows whole of your essay. If the layout is difficult to read, which is let's say: no spaces between paragraphs, then he/she immediately knows your writing needs more work to read. Hence, I suggest you to leave one space every time you open a new paragraph.

2. A writer needs to keep in mind that the intro is often what a reader remembers best. Your intro should be the best part of your essay. If you could, state your own opinion in the introduction itself with a statement expressing your opinion very clearly. That helps you take the reader in your desired direction.

I agree with eddies on the use of articles. They're slightly...awkward, I would say, just by looking at where they are placed.

However, I will also add to his statement by saying you should also be careful with your use of contractions. Since we don't have the prompt, we cannot be sure as to the level of formality that should go with this essay. Most of the time, contractions should be avoided in the more formal papers. Just a little piece of advice. Hope all goes well!!