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Parents have an exceptionally great impact on their children; TOEFL


Icebird 3 / 1  
Jan 7, 2013   #1
Thank for your editing.

I want you to correct grammer and the continuity in my essay.

Have a good day, Thanks.

Some people think that teachers in schools may have an influence on the children and adolescences. However, I strongly affirm that our parents have an exceptionally great impact on their children and thus I am in favor of the statement that parents are the best teachers. There are two reasons that I agree that statement that parents spend their time with their children than any other people such as school teacher and parents are the very people who have absolute love to their children.

First of all, parents have most of their time with their children and are the best teacher to influence on their young children. According to the research conducting by a professor, Hyun Gyu in Harvard University, children learn things half of the entire their lives in five and six years old. This means that as children grow up until five or six years old, their parents are the most important person who has obligation to teach their children. Young children can learn to speak, to walk, to swim and to have good manners from their parents. In addition, young children are inclined to learn from their parents' behavior and style of gestures. Therefore, parents as good teachers have an important role to be a role model to their children

Furthermore, parents are the best teacher in their children's lives because their parents feel us absolute love that school teachers, professors and even tutors do not have. They are the only one people who are willing to sacrifice for our successful and happy lives. For example, parents give up their time for our happiness. In addition, they always advise in earnest to their children because of our mentally maturity and this advices are always helpful in our lives and choice. Every time and every day, our parents are committed to us.

All parents are not perfect and ideal; however, it is a clear fact that their teaching of commitment and advices is like fertilizers for growing seed that becomes fragrant and showy flower. In conclusion, I firmly agree that parents are the best teachers to their children.

dumi 1 / 6,928 1592  
Jan 7, 2013   #2
Some people think that teachers in schools may have an influence on the children and adolescences.

You need to align your opening sentence with your topic better;
Some people argue that teachers in school have a better influence on the learning process of children.

There are two reasonsthat I agree that statement that parents spend their time with their children than any other people such as school teacher and parents are the very people who have absolute love to their children.

....''that'' is used frequently in closer intervals :(
There are two reasons why I agree with the statement. First, parents spend more time with the children than anyone else. Secondly, no one can love or care for children as their parents do.

Your introduction is good as it follows a good structure :)
riyak 6 / 13 1  
Jan 9, 2013   #3
I wrote an essay on this topic. Can you critique?

I agree with the statement. Children learn from different categories of people they interact with. Parents, other family members, teachers, peers , etc. Although children may be influenced by and/or learn from any person they interact with, in my opinion, parents however, are the first and best teachers that children have.

First, it is the parents who are the first point of contact for the children with the world. Children look at parents to guide them on their interactions with the outer world. Therefore, parents are the best teachers, here , to teach children about qualities such as kindness, patience, honesty ,etc in dealing with others. For eg, a parents who treats their neighbor rudely and inconsiderately, will possibly pass on the same behavioral trait to his kids. Whereas the opposite is also true.

Second, children learn a lot from what they observe. Since , children spend the maximum time, while they are growing up, with parents, specially, these days, when families are nuclear, parents are in the best position to imbibe the qualities in children which will help them become successful and decent human beings. For eg, it is through parents that children learn the value of hard work, sincerity, responsibility , etc

Third, because of the love and attachment that children feel for parents,children will be most receptive to advice or lessons on life imparted by parents. For eg, if a child is told by his friend to share chocolates he may . However, if a parent tells a child that sharing is a virtuous quality and it will also help the child win the love of his/her friends, the child, knowing that his parent has his/her best interest in mind, will most likely listen and follow his parent's advice albeit maybe a bit reluctantly at times.

Therefore, in my opinion, the role parents play in their children's life make them the best teachers.However, it is important for parents themselves to be aware of good values and be decent human beings to play that role.
Qingye 3 / 5  
Jan 29, 2013   #4
Maybe an introduction of the statement at the beginning is needed.


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