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How many people became a fitness center members some years ago?



arisandy14 7 / 11  
Sep 14, 2016   #1
Writting Task 1 male and female fitness membership between 1970 and 2000.

The bar chart indicates how many people between men and women becoming the fitness membership from 1970 to 2000.

In the first year, men of fitness membership stood at approximately 2100 and rose markedly twice as much as the number of member around 4000 in 1975.This figure experienced the substantial plunge over 10 years almost 1900. However, this occurred the slight rise approximately 1900 in 1985. Then, 1995 increased enormously and even peaked at three times as much as the number of members 5000. In the following year, this figure dropped sharply and even lower presentation than the first years from 2000 to 1000.

The figure of women fitness membership was initially 1000 in 1970 and rose moderately 2000 in the following year. This upward trend decreased minimally almost 1800 in 1980. Then, there were some fluctuations until the end of year. Before dropping approximately 800 in 2000, it ever happened the same points between 1985 and 1995 almost 2700.

Al in all, men of fitness membership experienced the highest members 5000 in 1995 although in the end of year they fell dramatically 1000. Despite the gradual fluctuations, women of fitness membership peaked at 2700 taking place in 1985 and 1995.


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justivy03 - / 2265  
Sep 14, 2016   #2
Hi Shandy, below are my thoughts on your analysis.

- women becomingbecame members of the fitness

- and rose markedlyremarkably twice as
- However, this occurred theobserved a slight
- rise approximately in 1900 in 1985.
- Then,in 1995 it increased
- than the first years from 2000 toat 1000 people.

- The figure of women fitness membership was initially at 1000 in 1970
- and rose moderately t 2000 in the following year.
- Before dropping at approximately 800 in 2000,
- it ever happened with the same points\

- Al in allOverall , men of fitness
- members at 5000 in 1995
- althoughand in the end of year
- they fell dramatically at 1000.

There you have it Shandy, I hope the above remark and corrections are helpful to your revision.


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