IELTS Task2 help me to correct and tell me how to improve (also give me a score if you like )
In some societies, it is increasingly common to try to achieve good health and fitness through physically demanding sports, special diets, or preventive medicine conventional or alternative. Some people, however, believe that the best way to stay fit and healthy is simply to lead a normal life.
With increasing awareness of health, more and more people tend to make extreme changes to improve their health on a daily basis. However, some approve that keeping a normal life is a key to stay healthy, In my opinion, the most important thing for one's health lies in the definition of normal life.
First, a proper attitude for keeping fit should take one's body condition into account. The standard of normal life differs from people to people and should pay attention to it that wether has caused harm to the body. A typical instance is that many people have a sedentary lifestyle and unregulated schedule for bedtime. In this result, although people who with the irregular routine consider that as a normal life, both physical and mental condition are impaired day by day.
Second, with both medical and technological development grow rapidly, it is not a negative manner to modify people's lifestyle slightly by compound with them. In addition, the environment is highly contaminated and polluted after industrial development which increased the potential risks for human to get fital diseases. To prevent people from being ill and unhealthy, taking the preventive measures, such as routine check from hospital, diet plan from nutritionists and exercise guidance from consultants, are necessary.
In conclusion, although staying in a normal life may have merits in some aspects, I still disagree with its ambiguous concept, and I regard people's health would be improved effectively by combining with the high technology which is used properly.
In some societies, it is increasingly common to try to achieve good health and fitness through physically demanding sports, special diets, or preventive medicine conventional or alternative. Some people, however, believe that the best way to stay fit and healthy is simply to lead a normal life.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?
With increasing awareness of health, more and more people tend to make extreme changes to improve their health on a daily basis. However, some approve that keeping a normal life is a key to stay healthy, In my opinion, the most important thing for one's health lies in the definition of normal life.
First, a proper attitude for keeping fit should take one's body condition into account. The standard of normal life differs from people to people and should pay attention to it that wether has caused harm to the body. A typical instance is that many people have a sedentary lifestyle and unregulated schedule for bedtime. In this result, although people who with the irregular routine consider that as a normal life, both physical and mental condition are impaired day by day.
Second, with both medical and technological development grow rapidly, it is not a negative manner to modify people's lifestyle slightly by compound with them. In addition, the environment is highly contaminated and polluted after industrial development which increased the potential risks for human to get fital diseases. To prevent people from being ill and unhealthy, taking the preventive measures, such as routine check from hospital, diet plan from nutritionists and exercise guidance from consultants, are necessary.
In conclusion, although staying in a normal life may have merits in some aspects, I still disagree with its ambiguous concept, and I regard people's health would be improved effectively by combining with the high technology which is used properly.
