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People have to be more careful for choosing their clothes because it may cause some problems


andika08 81 / 80 16  
Oct 5, 2016   #1
Some people say that the clothes people wear are the most important indication of what they area like. Others, however, say that people should not be judged by the clothes they wear.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reason for your answer and include any relevant examples from your knowledge or experience.


Nowadays, people who wear clothes become more attention for surrounding environment. The clothes that they wear is represent theirself. Beside that there is person comment about their appearance.

People wear clothes would reflect themselves with positive comments. For example, people who wear formal clothes when they go to the office from their house. There are several feature concern by looking at the style of dress which area wise, kind, polite and tidy also the effect is get interest with others. The physical appearance often creates the perception of the characteristics of a person, which are a picture of the personality or competency that they have. Employee wearing formal clothes as figure respected by the surroundings. Others, students who wear unformal to go to campus.

On the other hand people wear unformal clothes does not mean their attitudes not good. They choose unformal clothes for a reason. For example, successful people always wear the same shirt every day because of the habit of wearing it every day. Then, they looks like just have one collection for the clothes. In addition, the main reason people always wear same clothes because they do not understand about latest fashion. The function for wearing it they can easily remembered by many people. Beside that there are people who do not know about the habit of people just directly judged them used the same clothes, moreover, in the fact the people had many collections about dresses in their house.

In conclusion, I think today people have to be more careful for using dress because it will be cause a problem. If people use the clothes that do not precise with the existing situation, it will provoke of people around them. On the other hand, people should not be comment about other people clothes because they do not know about others character.
Lola12 10 / 9  
Oct 5, 2016   #2
Nowadays, people who wear clothes become more attention... -- i think it's better to say: who buy clothes --- are becoming more environmentally cautious.

is represent theirself --- are represeting themselves.

People wear clothes would reflect themselves with positive comments. - I don't quite catch what are you trying to say.
Bekuk22 15 / 21 3  
Oct 5, 2016   #3
hello there..
Let me give some correction for you. I hope my correction can help your writing..
people who wear clothes become more attention for surrounding environment.( as far as i know, this is not sentence but it is just subject because there is no main verb)that is just subject and sub verb but not main verb

People wear clothes would reflect themselves( their own personality ) with positive comments

People wear clothes would reflect themselves with positive comments .( there is no correlation between first sentence and the second. which one show positive sentence ? For example, people who wear formal clothes when they go to the office from their house.

Employee wearing formal clothes as figure respected by the surroundings ( there is no main verb ) I give sample example sentence which shows right sentence( people wearing modern fashion show one of their characteristic) show = main verb

I do apologize if I make mistake in mt correction..
May be Useful...
thank you.
justivy03 - / 2,366 607  
Oct 15, 2016   #4
Hi Andika, running through the essay as an initial review, I must say, you were able to point out both views and significantly expressed your take on the task at hand. However, for future writing reference, I would like you to focus on the minor details in writing, such as your linking verbs as well as the punctuation marks, as this are the links that can make or break your sentence and it will have an impact in the overall outcome of your essay.

Having said that, I would like to suggest a few enhancements towards the last paragraph of your essay.

- In conclusion, I think todays people
- have to be more careful for using dressin dressing up, because it will becan cause a problem.
- If people use thewear clothes
- that dois not precise with the existing situation,
- it will provoke ofcreate confusion from the people around them.
- On the other handHowever , people should
- not be comment about other peoplebe free in wearing clothes that fir and make them feel good about themselves and should not be judged with the way they dressbecause they do not know about others character .

There you have it Andika, I hope the above remarks and corrections help you in your revision.
Huynh Anh 4 / 6 2  
Oct 22, 2016   #5
Hello, here's my suggestion

Beside that there is A person GIVING comment about their appearance.
SEVERAL FEATURES CONCERNED...
EmployeeS wearing formal clothes SHOW THEIR RESPECT TO SURROUNDINGS.
they can BE easily remembered by many people.
the habit of OTHERS just directly judged them USING the same clothes AGAIN
THE FACT THAT, people haVE many collections
they do not know about THE CHARACTERISTICS OF OTHERS.

So sorry if my correction has something wrong. I hope it will help you!
Regard!


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