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Some people have chosen to take a holiday trip away from home to other provinces



ngoanhhhhh 1 / -  
Nov 30, 2021   #1

holidays in Vietnam



Tet marks the arrival of spring and is the most important celebration in Vietnamese culture. Most Vietnamese people enjoy this holiday with their family members in their hometown. However, in recent years, the trend of traveling far away from home during this holiday is frankly increasing. I have no objection to it.

Tet is an occasion for family reunion. It is special for us to gather, enjoy time, and share meals with friends or family members. At that time, family members return to their homeland to visit grandparents and parents. It is really a beauty of Vietnam's culture.

Besides, having a trip away from home is quite awesome to have new experiences with different customs, cultures and explore many beautiful scenes. It is also a different way to take a break and forget about the busy life after working hard for a whole year.

To sum up, Tet is a time for togetherness, cohesiveness. We should maintain that, no matter what we do and how we enjoy this occasion. I think " a Tet far from home" is not a bad idea. As a Vietnamese, I highly recommend people spend this holiday with family and relatives in their h

Holt  Educational Consultant - / 15463  
Nov 30, 2021   #2
is the most important celebration in Vietnamese culture.

What is the cultural relevance of Tet beyond marking a season? This reference has to be further explained if you are to properly identify the importance of this event on both a social and family basis.

It is special for us to gather,

What sets Tet apart from the other holidays when the family also gathers? What is the relevance of the family gathering? Why can the other festicals not duplicate the same sense of importance in their occassions?

It is really a beauty of Vietnam's culture.

You prove this with what description?

having a trip away from home is quite awesome to have new experiences with different customs,

Is this in reference to tourists? Please clarify who you are referring to in this sentence to help the reader better understand your reference point.

togetherness, cohesiveness.

Remove the comma and use the word "and" instead. That is because a comma is used to connect a list of at least 3 words, you only have 2 words to connect.

holiday with family and relatives in their h

Huh? Incomplete sentence.


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