TOEFL:People enjoy change.others like their lives to stay the same

Some people enjoy change, and they look forward to new experiences. Others like their lives to stay the same, and they do not change their usual habits. Compare these two approaches to life. Which approach do you prefer? Explain why.

People have a lot of similarities. But when it comes to the style of living, they dived on two major groups. Some of them opt for the change and enjoy new experiences. Others like to maintain the same style of life. If we compare those two approaches of life we find that there are a lot of reasons which lead to choose one of them.

Firstly, people who are looking for change and new experiences do not like the routine . They are always seeking to something new. They do not care if they made a bad decision by changing things in their lives. The most important thing for them is changing and moving. They think that life is more exciting when they try different things. This kind of people has some characters such dynamism that differ them from others. For example, there are a lot of workers who aim to change their job every three years. They think that longer they keep the same occupation , less they are creative and ambitious.

Other kind of people like their lives to stay the same because they have some fears. They are afraid from regretting any change that occurs in their lives. For them it is safer to keep things as they are rather than changing things and loosing them. This kind of people believes totally on the proverb that says bird in the hand is worth two in the bush. They do not opt for the adventurous life. Their lives are well quit calm without any change and without any regret. For example, radical politicians always want to keep the rules as they are. They refuse any change in their countries. For them changing is loosing.

Personally, I think changing and trying new experiences is better that keeping things in our lives as they are. Changing allows people to broaden they knowledge and their skills in lives. They cut down the fear of surpassing the obstacles and all dangers that prevent people from getting what they really want and hope in their lives. Obviously, changing brings most of time some happiness and some energy to look forward.

Changing to getting something better is good. But people should not be impulsive in their lives. They should make some diagnostic about what it needs to be change and what it needs to be kept the same in their lives.

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If we compare those two approaches of life we find that there are a lot of reasons which lead to choose one of them. VS . Compare these two approaches to life.

Firstly, ?....Where is your 'Secondly'

If we compare those two approaches of life we find that there are a lot of reasons which lead people to choose one or the other of them.

They are always seeking to something new.

Here is another way to write this sentence:
The other kind of person likes life to stay the same, because this person has some fears.

Personally, I think changing and trying new experiences is better that keeping things in our lives as they are. ---Excellent sentence!!

Changing allows people to broaden they knowledge and their skills in life .

I am not sure what are you writing this for, so I will judge you based a bit harshly.

Firstly, you might want to state your stand in your introduction. This is a technique my tutor taught me, which improves clarity as the examiners will know what to expect.

Secondly, your discussion is quite shallow and may show a lack of maturity. You lack a comparison, where you will say why people stagnation is good, and evaluate and rebut it. You may also say why others would say change is bad and similarly, find fallacies or assumptions in their argument, evaluate their validity, be it based on circumstances or something else (which can then be solved) or rebut them like above. Something like those.

For example, your paragraphs could be about how people who don't like change say that change is bad. (please specify how, and make it easy to rebut, common arguments may not necessarily be hard to rebut) In response, you can say how the desire for change have led people in the past to raise up against oppression, to lead to unity or a better government in response to why peole might say change is bad, and point out the sufferings people will be in if no change is observed.

Of course, what I gave above is only how one paragraph could possibly b in my opninion, but I thought you might find it useful as an example of a guideline. Please include more paragraphs

Your last paragraph "Changing to getting something better is good. But people should not be impulsive in their lives. They should make some diagnostic about what it needs to be change and what it needs to be kept the same in their lives." is not a very good way to end your essay in my opnion. While I am not an expert in writing introductions and conclusions, I just think that it does not give the feeling of a close, since you just add a new idea that is directly related to your question.

But I will praise you for that last paragraph because it shows balance, which does show that you are informed, able to think about the issue and mature. Good Job!

As you probably know, I am not a moderator, so I may not be the best person to judge you, but these are my sincere comments, I hope you benefit from them. Good Luck on you essay!

thank u wang for the time that you have spent to edit my essay

zhiyang ,
this topic is one of the toefl writing test annals.

i know that i should give my opinion in the introduction , but in this kind of essays , it is clearly asked to compare two diffrent things than to give the personal opinion. i do not what is the right organization .

for the number of the paragrphs , they have taught us that a toefl essay has five paragraphs. can I add more?

also , please give me an idea of conclusing this essay .
and thank u very much for your help. you opened my eyes for somethings i need to improve my writing

thank u.