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'People need food, fashion, and health' - advertisements may improve our lives


ridwan 8 / 16 2  
Mar 30, 2014   #1
Some people say that advertising encourages us to buy things we really do not need. Other say that advertisements tell us about new products that may improve our lives. Which viewpoint do you agree with? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Advertisement which is information to some people is related with need people. Advertisement gives much information to people such as food, fashion, and health. I agree advertisements tell us about new products that may improve our lives.

Firstly, everybody needs food because some of people necessary food to energy. Television often shows promotion about food such as noodle and meal consume for a living. For example, if we are watching television usually there is a promotion offer about food product like a noodle. It clearly that advertisement gives information about new product. So, we know it useful for our lives.

Secondly, Advertisement not only promotion food, but also it promotion about fashion. It useful for people because it needs style. There are many kinds about style such as T-shirt and veil. For example, television always advertising veil model. Where it wears to fashion in Idul Fitri. It obvious that advertisement which makes easy us gives many benefits.

Lastly, advertisement is an information tool for giving to people. Advertisement often promotion about health such as medicine and health tools. For example, television, radio, internet and magazine always promotion about advertisement health, the purpose promotion advice about health to people. It example clearly that advertisement encourages us to healthy life. So, advertisement useful to human life in the world.

In conclusion, advertising can improve our lives where all of people need food, fashion, and health. So, we know about them from advertisement. furthermore, advertisement gives the best product to need our lives.
eddies [Contributor] 25 / 1,208 476  
Mar 30, 2014   #2
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dumi 1 / 6,927 1592  
Mar 30, 2014   #3
Advertisement which is information to some people is related with need people. Advertisement gives much information to people such as food, fashion, and health. I agree advertisements tell us about new products that may improve our lives.

I remember providing you with a guideline for constructing your essay. I feel you should pay some attention to that structure because it contains all necessary structural features that help you earn a good score. As per that approach, you have not adequately presented the background of the issue. Actually, it is the most important part of your intro which introduces the issue and its importance to the reader.
fikri 5 / 317 71  
Apr 1, 2014   #4
also, you need to pay more attention with your capitalization, maybe it seems a little mistake, but it could be your big problem when you deal with the real test. so, you should be more carefully
eddies [Contributor] 25 / 1,208 476  
Apr 5, 2014   #5
Some people say that advertising encourages us to buy things we really do not need. Other say that advertisements tell us about new products that may improve our lives. Which viewpoint do you agree with? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Have look at the prompt. This raises two opinions that should be argued. Create one content paragraph for, and one against for body para

Well, if you have a question that you don't like at all, then you can write with a 5-paragraph essay. You write one introduction, three bodies, and one conclusion. This can help you write more words, but some seems inefficient, by writing too many words.

With a 4-paragraph essay, you are easy to develop your paragraph properly, one content paragraph for, and one against. This is good for coherence and cohesion between sentence to sentence and paragraph to paragraph, and for which in the five-paragraph structure this is weak :D
Pahan 1 / 1,906 553  
Apr 6, 2014   #6
With a 4-paragraph essay, you are easy to develop your paragraph properly, one content paragraph for, and one against. This is good for coherence and cohesion between sentence to sentence and paragraph to paragraph, and for which in the five-paragraph structure this is weak :D

Well eddies, I think it is ok to give reasons for the side you take on in the 4 para. Again, it depends on the type of the prompt. If is to discuss, then what you say is a better way. But, in this case it is asking for our opinion. In such case it is better to state your opinion and use all your body paras to justify why you hold your opinion.

Firstly, everybody needs food because some of people necessary food togives us energy for living.

Secondly, Advertisementadvertisements not only promotionpromote food, but also it promotion aboutpromotes fashion.


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