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Nowadays for many people the Internet is replacing regular books.


william731 18 / 43 13  
Feb 14, 2013   #1
Can anyone give me some comments about this essay?

Nowadays for many people the Internet is replacing regular books. What do you think will happen in the future and what is your opinion about this trend?

With the rapid pace in technological development, the internet has been widely used in various aspects of our lives. For instance, it is very prevalent today for people to read books in the internet compared with decades ago. It is believed that the network development will continually impact people's reading habit, as will be now discussed.

Firstly, it is not doubt that people can assess the books they like online in a convenient manner. The internet has been gradually replacing the physical existence of books. As a result, books publishers has developed electronic books for their customers to satisfy people's changing reading styles.

In addition, libraries are losing their meaning since people rather read books online. Therefore, it is believed that traditional libraries will ultimately be forced to transform to online facilities. People can then assess the online reading materials using their memberships.

Undoubtedly, the convenience of online reading does benefit us in certain ways. Due to the pace advancement in electronic devices, people can read everywhere, just like they are holding a real book. However, I personally prefer reading a real book over a virtual book. The reason is that I can keep my favorite books as collections on my bookshelf which cannot be done by electronic books. For health consideration, concentrating on a monitor for too long will result in detrimental effect on eyes, such as eyesight problem.

All in all, it is for sure that the internet will substitute books in the future. this trend is beneficial to human being as the convenience of online reading is undeniable.
dumi 1 / 6,927 1592  
Feb 14, 2013   #2
For instance, it is very prevalent today for people to read books in the internet compared with decades ago.

This sentence does not convey your idea properly. What you must focus on is that internet acts to replace books. This is what I suggest;

For instance, the reading habit of people has been greately diverted from reading books to surfing the internet in the recent past.

It is believed that the network development will continually impact people's reading habit, as will be now discussed.

What is your opinion? Your prompt asks you that and you better state your own opinion here. This sentence sounds a bit vague and I wish if you said it more direct;

In my opinion, people will have very low preference for books in their physical form in the future, and would depend on the internet for their references to acquire knowledge.

Firstly, it is notno doubt that people can assessaccess the books they like online in a convenient mannermore conveniently .
OP william731 18 / 43 13  
Feb 15, 2013   #3
Thanks for your advice
joythblessy 86 / 272 15  
Feb 17, 2013   #4
Hai william...

You have some good points but it didn't come out in a nice way..

Your introduction..

Address the question..
Give your opinion if prompt asked to give...
In your introduction i didn't see a clear opinion..(.
This part i don't think there is need of writing an example..

2nd..
What will happened in the future..
It is better to mention in future, e-books will be popular, libaries...
Well...these points you should organise under this question...

Next...

What is your opinion about this trend...
Last body para you have points to answer this question..
Organise it well.

In conclution..
You should restate..
The answers of all the question, in very short..

So you need organisation of the answers..

In the starting i thought you are supporting e-book trand, towards last i feel you dodn't like this trend. But finally...):

Be careful about the questions...
Tessy
Dawnh 1 / 1 1  
Feb 17, 2013   #5
I think that you should not only talk about how it affects you in bad ways but also include how it beneficial it is to other and the environment. For example autistic children, they are able to use those devices to read with out tearing them the can zoom in or out, practice writing the same world right next to it and etc. and think about the trees that were saving. Now all libraries will shut down but with technology it saves money since a library doesn't have to have 20 of the same books that cost with discount around $20 while they can 10 for a price of under $10 with worrying about someone not returning the book and not also paying the fee but with internet it automatically deletes after curtain number of days. I hopes this helps. I don't want to seem judgmental just wanted you too see the positive. And i do agree with you in most cases.
OP william731 18 / 43 13  
Feb 17, 2013   #6
Thanks for your advice :)


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