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Most people no longer remember the original purposes of traditional or religious festivals



minhtri 1 / -  
Jul 2, 2021   #1

The forgotten identity of festivals



Some people argue that we no longer remember the original purposes of festivals, and most of them treat them
as a opportunity to have fun. While I agree that enjoyment seems to be a main goal during festival times, I do not agree that people have forgotten the meaning of these festivals.

On the one hand, traditional or religious festivals have certainly become a occasion for celebration. In VietNam, Hung Vuong festival is a good example of a festival period when people just pay attention to celebrate a party, have nice meals, and have fun with friends and family. Most people look forward to the Hung Vuong Festival as a day to enjoy a day-off rather than practice religion. Gradually, most people have just remembered the Hung Vuong Festival as a day for them to relax and have enjoyment.

However, I disagree with the idea that the underlying meaning of such festivals has been forgotten. In VietNam primary schools, children are taught in detail about the religious reason for celebrating the Hung Vuong Festival. For instance, when the Hung Vuong Festival is coming, children will learn some History's lessons about the effortness which Hung Kings made to maintain peace for VietNam's residents and protect the country against the rivals. Thus, in the sense that people generally learn the stories behind these occasions at an early age.

In conclusion, although enjoyment is a primary goal of them during festivals, I believe that they still have an awareness of knowing the reason why these festivals exist.

Holt  Educational Consultant - / 15372  
Jul 3, 2021   #2
This is a single opinion extent essay. There is no room in the choices for you to take a neutral opinion, or for you to side with both. The best combined opinion you can deliver will be in the forum of a properly stated thesis opinion such as:

I disagree with this statement to the extent that there is always room for fun amidst remembrance during cultural holidays.

Note how in the above version, only one clear opinion is supported (disagree) even as I leave room to show that the other opinion has some merit ( to the extent that). The next paragraphs should combine a support for the reasoning opinion ( there is always room... )

The second paragraph of this essay is actually quite good and contains 2 discussion points that would have properly supported the presented opinion. This essay would have scored well had you done that instead.

As of now, the essay will be scored based a position of needing a more opinion reflective discussion. The current presentation is underdeveloped as the first paragraph is not single opinion supportive. There is no proper opinion reflected based on writing directions.
minhhuyenle 1 / 2  
Jul 3, 2021   #3
You have some wrong spelling : effortless ; an opportunity ; an occasion


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