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People do not have to get married to be happy, so more and more people choose to stay single



Linh080902 1 / -  
Jul 12, 2021   #1

Wretched Institution of marriage



These days, the number of individuals opt for living alone, which has become quite normal. From my perspective, this trend is unfavorable due to the following three reasons. Firstly, the tendency to stay single increases the rate of people suffering from psychological problems. There is a high likelihood that the unmarried have to cope with numerous strains of study, work, and finance by themselves. They do not have intimate enough relationships to confide in, which leads them to have more adverse attitudes. A recent study discloses that single people often resort to drugs to relieve stress and many become addicted. Secondly, the single lifestyle results in population aging. People living alone tend to spend all their time enjoying their own life instead of having a baby, which is considered a key contributor to the decline in fertility rates. Lastly, this trend inhibits long-term economic growth. Some people might say that single life boosts economic growth because individuals can completely concentrate on careers. However, these might be merely short-term benefits because of predictions about a dramatic increase in the proportion of older people, which will put heavy pressure on health systems and welfare. Moreover, a decline in the working-age population is unavoidable, so the economy may be in a deep recession due to the scarcity of the labor force. In conclusion, the unmarried lifestyle is detrimental due to problems of psychology, the aging population, and the economy.

Holt  Educational Consultant - / 15467  
Jul 13, 2021   #2
This is a good example of a failing score task 2 essay. The minimum word count of 250 words was not met, indicating a high deduction rate for an under discussed essay. The response format is incorrect as the original reference is "In many countries ", which was not identified in the restatement. Thus changing the topic from an international to local concern. Though the response is correct, the student did not present a discussion outline to build the discussion points.

Though proper reasoning was provided, the lack of logical paragraph based explanations per reason was not shown. A lack of proper response development led the essay to a failing coherence and cohesiveness score. Individually developed topic paragraph discussions are needed to accomplish that task.

The essay provides a clear lack of interest on the part of the writer to provide a score adherent discussion of this topic. No effort was placed in the development of the essay.


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