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People may become crazy over such things as sports, religion and learning English


Hujjatul19 45 / 70 3  
Nov 15, 2016   #1
TED Summary _ English Mania

People have their own types that they are crazy about such as sports, religious and learning English mania. People would go to put much effort on their interest. Lets pick Chinese as an example. They started to learn English in the very first time and therefore China is the world's largest English speaking. Factually, in order to get a bright future, or to tackle global matters, English is involved in it.

MaggieP 1 / 2 1  
Nov 15, 2016   #2
Hi Hujjatul,
here are some suggestions for you and hope they are helpful:
... they are crazy about, such as sports, religious belifs and learning English mania.
A comma may help the content become clearer and religious seems to be an adjective which is not suitable here.
Let' s
... largest English speaking country .
FactuallyActually , in order to get a ...
akbarmappiare 31 / 469 275  
Nov 16, 2016   #3
Hi Miss Mujadiddah.
I have read you summary closely and found some which you should develop to show better progress. Please, you meet my notes and review them.

Miss, when you wanna create a summary, you should display identity of your original video briefly. You can cover all in a sentence. For example, "THIS SUMMARY IS CREATED FROM A VIDEO ON TED'S WEBSITE, WHICH WAS FILLED BY ....... IN..... That explanation can introduce the orginal video which you extracted. Besides that, you fail showing key points of the summary. You should be able to cover all elements of the question (1H+5W). Unfortunately, you cannot make readers curious to watch the video because you can show its contents. It can seem like a meaningless paragraph. You have to have the main topic which you will review in the summary so that you do not move from a topic to another topic. Follwing that, dd not include supporting sentence to make them as untiy. Please, you can provide more time to work it so that you can show the better effort.

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