Why more and more people are migrating to cities life in search of a better life?

CITIES AND MIGRATION

Many people have indeed been trying to settle down in urban areas for a secure and high-standard life, however, life in cities is not as easy as one thinks over. Although there will undoubtedly be some negative consequences of this trend, solutions can be taken to mitigate these potential problems.

There are several issues one has to face while living in cities. The main problem for anyone who hopes to migrate to a large city is that the cost of living is likely to be much higher than one is in a small town or village. City dwellers face financial difficulties such as paying higher prices for food, accommodation and transportation. Another issue is that a metropolis can suffer from more social issues such as traffic congestion, high crime rates and environmental degradation. As a result, people can not enjoy a peaceful life due to busyness.

However, there are several actions that could be taken to solve the problems mentioned above. To commence with, governments need to invest money in the building of affordable and social housing to reduce the living cost. Secondly, to minimize the pressure on major cities, authorities can move industry to rural areas and provincial town. Furthermore, governments have to restrict the use of private vehicles in the inner city to allenate traffic congestion. Also, if they were able to ease public transportations such as train and bus, more people would use them.

In conclusion, the phenomenon has exerted a number of detrimental impacts, such as high the cost of living and more social issues, on society. Strong measures, including applying appropriate rules and adjustments by the government.

While the gramamr is not perfect in the prompt paraphrasing, you were on point with your writing reference. However, you did not properly respond to the question you were given since:

1. You did not reference that government solutions will be discussed.
2. There was no summary of 2 ways the government can help resolve the urban living problems.

Full points cannot be awarded in the preliminary scoring because of the aforementioned reasons. Therefore, your score will not receive the scoring boost it could have had with a more appropriate restatement + writer's opinion.

The discussion is a bit difficult to follow because you have separated the problems from the solution in the presentation. For a better C+C score, you must ensure that you present a problem and a solution related to it in each of the discussion paragraphs. That was you keep the connectivity of the discussion within the problem-solution format, allowing for a clearer understanding of your opinion ideas on the part of the examiner.

Your essay reached the desirable length because you were able to get right on the topic, so you shouldn't have any problem finishing it under the allocated 40 minutes.

Your lexical resource is impressive as well, as you were always trying to vary your vocabulary to avoid repetition. However, you faced many grammatical errors when paraphrasing, such as "high the cost" ---> "heightened the cost", "allenate"-->"alienate",... There are some errors in number agreement as well, "rural areas<=>provincial towns, public transportations-->public transportation. You may also want to focus on only one idea per paragraph, such as in supporting paragraph 2, where you have up to three ideas in one section. Though you manage to keep your essay length, you can refine your essay more if you only need to provide one solution for every problem you discussed, to improve the connectivity of the discussion.