Although this may brings a de
need longer time to earn money(...)starting
a business has some benefits
start a business has some benefits for indovodual and other .
The explanation here is not clear. What do you mean by "other"? Is it for other people, or other company?
For instance, that will teaches a person to be an independent man, create a new job field for unemployment people and improve the financial condition of his country.
I think you do not need to put this in the introduction since it is a further explanation for the argument.
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, a business need (...)to build connection with other
there will be a job field wich is
opened(...)person learns how to be
In conclusion, starting
own business brings many advantages toward an individual, public and the government,
(I think the explanation about the advantage for the government is not stated celarly. Look at it carefully