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IELTS TASK 2: People sometimes argued that using of electronic devices is harmful on personal live



broibra 17 / 19  
Dec 2, 2015   #1
The use of electronic media has a negative effect on personal relationships between people. To what extent do you agree or disagree ?

Since the contrivance of modern technology, the behavior of many people to be different against their peers. People sometimes argued that using of electronic devices is harmful for their mutual lives. In my opinion, I believe this invention had drawbacks and benefit.

People who argue that the modern media such as computer and cell phones has a negative effect, they are claim sometime some people become selfish beings. In the past, people respect the intimacy of relationship by time spending together with their friends or family. However, today's modern media will rob people time for gathering with their friends or family. As a result, modern people may feel lonely and miserable because no strong relationship has ever built.

Although there were many changes due to production electronic tools likely had a drawback, I think that it has positive qualities that people has to consider. First, electronic media creates a possibility of long distance relationship. In the past, it is very difficult to stay connected with friends and families in different country or the abode of the far, but today using video call such as Skype is very easy and realistic to meet friends or family in screens every day. Moreover, people can also find some people with the same interest and make a new relationship. This type of relationship which involving the same hobbies will make relationship priceless, last longer and comfortable.

The argument reveals that even though the electronic media may cause undesirable consequence, I believe that it has a great deal plus points in most aspects in today's form of relationship.



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