The first few errors that caught my eye in the first paragraph are the LR and GRA mistakes. she writer obviously did not review his presentation otherwise, he would have seen and corrected the errors:
The semi-colon is not needed. Use only one punctuation mack at a time. You cannot use emojis in formal academic wiring.
I agree with the latter claim.
Since you agree with the latter claim, you should be explaining why you are convinced why your point of view is correct. By using a comparison discussion that proves both sides to be correct, your solo opinion is now incorrect and without merit. Present the other point of view only to explain how it supports your opinion. That creates 2 supporting ideas that fully develops your point of view. There will be no scores applied to opposing point of view supporting arguements.