the problem with Recidivism
Nowadays has been receiving re-offending after finishing a long great deal of time in prison public attention. This trend can be attributed to a whole host of reasons. and some feasible solutions should be taken into account to tackle it
There are some causes that lead to the offenders some criminals who finished their punishment are hopelessly reintegrated with society This means that, Fails taught new skills as the intention of offending is hard to have they have not had a chance to educate and a preparation for their future Therefore the established. Second, the former convict's opportunity which finding job during the sentence period that would lead ex-convicts to commit a crime repeatedly- For example, there are some restaurants in HCM city restrict former offenders from registering for becoming a waiter earache Having trouble with financial matters, it's easy for them to relapse into criminal behavior.
There are some solutions to solve the problem how reducing of re-offenders first, one way the rate to tackle this is to ensure that convicts will be equipped with some useful skills during the sentence KI.ONG period which helps them to bring value and contribute to society after
for example, vocational courses in highly-demanded fields such as plumbing or mechanic chough be provided for prisoners so they will successfully. after being released from prison Second, by taking subsidized organisms offering sufficient jobs for former convicts from governments This means that with a sense of being helpful and valuable would be encouraged to
In conclusion, ex-convicts immerse themselves in social life again with the convent convincing argument mentioned crimes again By applying rate of reoffer das above ex-prisoners who commit Some solution of government, we will decline
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