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Some people think studying from the past offers no benefits to today's life, while others disagree



Penelopee 3 / 5  
Jul 2, 2021   #1

the values of teaching history



History appears to be one of the immense values showing the spirit and life of each nation throughout the course of history. Nonetheless, the purposes of studying this subject is still controversial, sparking off a debate about whether history becomes useless in contemporary society or there is information which people should know by history. This essay will discuss these viewpoints and voice my opinion.

It is undeniable that there is the higher demand in emphasizing specific aspects rather than history in the modern life. Compared to some respects such as technology, science or economy which can decide on countries' development, history is stories in the past that are theoretical and have limited use for advanced society. Additionally, some anecdotes in history seems to be not plausible and accurate enough. This has left many controversies among scholars.

Nevertheless, there is a hold perception that history offers overwhelming advantages for people in today's world. First of all, people can perceive their origin and how their countries were changed and developed during distinct stages by learning history and reading historical materials. For instance, Vietnamese generally appreciate and feel proud bravery, achievements and unity of their ancestors throughout history. Simultaneously, when learning history and realize fault of the past, the same failing will be avoided, ensuring the development and safety of many countries in domestic and international issues.

To sum up, no matter how useless history can be in modern world, it still contains information which is useful for most people. From my perspective, history should be passed into subsequent generations in the light of it's immense values.

Do you think I can get 5.5 with this essay? Thanks for your help!

Holt  Educational Consultant - / 15460  
Jul 3, 2021   #2
In my opinion, this still isn't a 5.5 essay. The prompt paraphrase does not accurately reflect the original discussion points as the first sentence is a statement that reflects personal insight. The paraphrase actually starts in the second sentence. The first paragraph needs no more than 3 sentences reflecting:

- Public opinion 1
- Public opinion 2
- Personal statement

A proper restatement reflects only the provided discussion points. Any additional comments creates an inaccuracy in prompt interpretation.

Due to the provided instructions, the essay should have 3 comparative paragraphs. The 1st 2 shall explain /discuss the logic behind each public opinion. Once the writer has proven that analysis, reflecting a public opinion through proper pronoun usage, the writer may then decide on a personal opinion witten from a first person perspective (GRA related). This essay fails to differentiate the talking points of view, causing confusion for the reader as all paragraphs represent a generally first person opinion , without proper grammar references.


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