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Some people think that teachers should be able to ask disruptive children to leave the class. Do you



hongngoc1006 1 / 1  
Jul 31, 2017   #1
A large amount of people are likely to support the idea that teachers have the authority to dismiss disobedient children from the class. From a personal vantage point, it is not a counter-effective measure and there exist other solutions relied on.

On the one hand, the possibility that forcing disruptive children to leave the class is a temporary method, what's more, it can be arisen some adverse consequences. Firstly, as a result of severely mental effects, bad-behaved children are prone to retreat into their shells and turn into violent individuals as well. Secondly, this measure can not be achieved educational goals. On the grounds of interrupting the class, learning's quality might be affected tremendously. Furthermore, the obligation of teachers providing academic and moral education tend to be uncompleted.

On the other hand, there are some effective alternative to address this problem. The first solution should be noticed is that parents and teachers ought to join hands together to generate moral lessons for their children. Thanks to the intimate relationship, parents can find easy to educate disruptive children and get them to turn over a new leaf. The second solution concerns about other fruitful punishments. This can be exemplified by the case that in some Japan school, disruptive children ask for plant trees, it is greatly constructive their heath.

All things considered, asking bad-mannered children to leave the class can not be considered an optimal method. Additionally, other solutions should be mentioned to cope with this issue.

Holt  Educational Consultant - / 15393  
Jul 31, 2017   #2
Hong, please remember to post the full prompt of the essay the next time you post. At this point, I am not sure about how to review your work because of the missing instructions. I have no way of telling how well you understood the discussion instructions and if you followed the discussion criteria because of the missing guidelines.

Overall, your essay lacks a coherent presentation. There is a lack of cohesiveness because you only mention several ideas in each paragraph without thoroughly discussing why you chose to discuss these subjects in relation to the prompt. Please consider opting to present only one well explained idea in the paragraph because you are being judged as to how well you can develop your related English sentences, not your knowledge of public opinion.

There is no relationship between your discussions and asking disruptive children to leave the class. You are talking about bullying while the prompt is just discussing an unruly child in class. There is a difference between a bully and an unruly child. This alone shows that you do not understand the discussion parameters, which I cannot explain to you because you did not include it in this presentation. This is not a very good essay. It has grammar structure and development problems that show a lack of ability to accurately develop simple English sentences. You have confusing sentences in every paragraph, and the discussions need more work. Even without the exact topic on hand, I can tell that this essay will not pass in an actual setting.
OP hongngoc1006 1 / 1  
Aug 1, 2017   #3
Thanks for your great help. It was the first time that I posted my essay, I'm so sorry because of this inconvenience. I will follow instructions in next essays.


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