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Many people go to university for academic study. More people should be encouraged to do vocational.



nam163be 1 / -  
Jul 26, 2021   #1
Many people go to university for academic study. More people should be encouraged to do vocational training because there is a lack of qualified workers such as electricians and plumbers.

To what extent do you agree or disagree?



It is true that numerous people opt for following tertiary education instead of vocational training. While nobody can deny university graduates, I firmly agree that students should be encouraged to take part in training courses to become skilled workers.

there are two prime reasons why workers should be trained professionally. Firstly, the more society develops, the higher need for the construction of a large number of facilities is. The need for manual workers specializing in terms of electricity, water, or public buildings..is increasingly omnipresent. Therefore, in order to meet the community's need of collar-workers, there must be more people who are supported to land manual jobs. For example, the warranty of some public facilities like schools and hospitals,.. must be carried out by specialized workers. Secondly, if there are so many students leaning towards pursuing higher education, the unemployment rate will rocket because the labour market will not generate enough occupations for all of them.

Furthermore, it is necessary that vocational training should be taken seriously in both families and schools. In terms of schools, vocational knowledge needed to be included in some curriculum activities or hands-on experiences with a view to providing students with the opportunity to gain insight into that fields not to mention that they may act as career orientation for pupils having intention to pursue that kind of works. Last but not least, it is time for parents to back their children up and give their offsprings assistance to attend programmes teaching them to be professional workers as a long-term goal to fulfil their ambition if children are drawn attention their attention to that specialization.

In conclusion, I agree that we should encourage more students to be trained as professional workers since, without them, society can not function effectively.

Holt  Educational Consultant - / 15466  
Jul 27, 2021   #2
The writer must never include a personal opinion when restating the prompt. There should not be any claims made pertaining to the truth of any statement because that will change the discussion presentation and alter the purpose of the discussion. This creates a seperation from the original prompt that would lower the score due to non-compliant paraphrasing. This is the end result of the first sentence in the first paragraph sentence presentation. Interpret the prompt as close as possible to the original without changing the original intent of the presentation. It must be pointed out though that the opinion thesis in the same paragraph accurately responds to the question.

Proofreading is a requirement prior to the submission of any task. While the discussion is on point, the grammar issues in relation to word capitalization and punctuation mark usage will cost the writer serious deductions. As a reminder the first word of every new sentence/ paragraph is always capitalized. Ellipses, though creative and dramatic in function, is not used in formal academic writing. Finally, 2 punctuation macks cannot be used simultaneously in one sentence. Only one or the other can be used. Double punctuation usage is a very serious grammatical evor that shows a lack of English writing rules familiarity.

The reverse paraphrase for the conclusion is also improperly - presented as it lacks a s of 40 words or 2-5 sentences, whichever comes first.


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