IELTS Task 1; Percentage of British Students able to speak languages other than English, 2000-2010

mariana13 4 / 8

Feb 6, 2017 #1

The charts below show the proportion of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.

Foreign languages knowledge among UK students

The charts illustrate the percentage of students who were capable to speak other languages aside from English in 2000 and 2010, at one University in England. During the time, students became more interested in other languages than them past generations. The only language that maintained the percentage of 10 during 10 years was German language only.

In 2000, the predominant languages was Spanish and French with 20% and 15% respectively, whilst 2010 brought a slight decreas in the interest of students to focus on Spanish and French language, leveling them at 10% with German language.

However, two other languages and other languages gradually increased from 10% and 15% to 15% and 20% respectively, in 10 years.

It is also noticeable that the choice of students of not speaking any other languages slightly increased by 5 % too, as in 2000 counted 30% but in 2010 reached 35%. Despite passing times it is very significant that the generations and times change very fast.

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akbarmappiare 31 / 445

Feb 7, 2017 #2

Hi Mariana, I am gonna try reviewing your writing. Hopefully, these can finalize yours.

Firstly, Be careful of deciding an overview. You have presented the overview, but your interpretation was inappropriate.
During the time, students became more interested in other languages than them past generations

You said that the students tended to learn the other language in 2010 although the percentage of the category "no other language" increased in 2010. You have to analyze the data better so that you can obtain a higher score. The overview is a point for assessing your writing. Besides that, you avoid mentioning the percentage because it will seem as the detailed information. You can pour the detailed data in the body paragraph, not in the introduction.

Secondly, you should remember that the good paragraph consists of more than 2 sentences. Actually, you don't need to separate the information into 3 paragraphs of body. We should admit that systematic can affect the coherence and cohesion in the writing. Apart from all, I only remind you that your job in the writing task 1 of IELTS is to compare figures each other, not to describe separately. It is sense of the writing task. I suggest you read many examples of writing task 1 to get the points which you should include.

I really believe you can master this section on condition that you wanna practice again and again. Happy writing
GOOD LUCK

Holt Educational Consultant - / 15344

Feb 7, 2017 #3

Ana, please remember to double check your spelling before you submit your essay for scoring. Keep in mind that points will be deducted for misspelled words, even if it is only because your finger did not hit the key hard enough on the keyboard. The main problem that I see with your current essay is that you do not always meet the minimum sentence requirements in the paragraphs. Take for example paragraph 2 in this essay. You should have included the stand alone sentence, that supposedly created your third paragraph with the second paragraph since that paragraph lacks the sentence requirement. These summary reports can usually be completed in 3 paragraphs. You had the ability to do that with this essay. Somehow you forgot the requirements of the essay and that would definitely affect your final score, even though you included all of the related information in your summary.

Gigih12 10 / 7

Feb 7, 2017 #4

Hello, here's my advice for your writing

1. It is important to paraphrase your first sentence in your introductory paragraph because it seems quite same as the question. Ex: cahnge students = pupils

2. During ~~the~~ these time (mention 2 years, 2000 and 2010), .....

3. ~~German language~~ Germany only.

4. the predominant languages was Spanish and French at ~~with~~ 20% and 15% respectively,

5. whilst in 2010 brought a slight decrease....

6. However, two other languages ~~and other languages~~ increased gradually from 10% and 15% to ...

I think that's all, keep writing