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The percentage of juvenile ever born by women aged 40-44s in Australia in 1981, 1986, 1996, and 2006


WasishaSisha 16 / 20  
Oct 30, 2016   #1
The table below presents the number of children ever born to women aged 40-44 years in Australia for each year the information was collected since 1981.

The given table reveals regarding the percentage of juvenile ever born to women aged 40-44 in Australia in 1981, 1986, 1996, and 2006. Overall, it can be seen that after 1980's women with three or more children has declined and there were noticeably rise for women had not children at all.

In 1981 and 1986, for women who with no children, one and two children proportion increased progressively at 9.7%, 8.7% and 35.6% in 1986 respectively; in contrast, women were more likely to have had three or more children markedly drop into 27.0% from 27.4% and 18.9% from 27.6% in 1986.

In 1996 and 2006, all number of children that ever born had similar trend with the former years. There were significant jump the women were childless (12.8% and 15.9%) and only had one child (11.3% and 13.2%) in 1996 and 2006 from 1996 and 2006. Women aged in their early forties were had given birth two child had a very slight increase from 38.2% in 1996 to 38.3% in 2006. Moreover, the proportion who had three child and more were decline from 24.6% to 21.5% and 13.1% to 11% respectively.

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akbarmappiare 31 / 469 275  
Oct 30, 2016   #2
Hi wasisha..
These are my corrections for your writing. Please, meet my notes and review them.
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... aged 40-44 in Australia in FOUR DIFFERENT YEARS; 1981, 1986, 1996, and 2006. Overall, it can be seen that MOST OF WOMEN IN THAT CATEGORY HAD TWO CHILDREN. INA ANY CASE, after 1980's, THE PERCENTAGE OF women with three or more children has HAD declined and , WHILE there were noticeably riseS for women WHICH had not children at all.

(Make you sure that each good paragraph has at least 3 sentences. Therefore, you should create 2 sentences for the overview)

In BETWEEN1981 and 1986, for women (...) children proportion HAD increased progressively BY 1.2%, 1.1%, AND 6.6% at9.7%, 8.7% and 35.6%in 1986(you should harnesS the past perfect here so that you display difference between two years) respectively; in contrast, women were(Actually, here are whO and were, but I omit them) more likely to (...) markedly dropPED in to 27.0% from 27.4% ...

(Pay attention to consitency of the tense)

... that ever born had A similar trend ...
There were WAS (Verb Agreement and articles are essential factors) A significant jump FOR THE RATE OF the women were childless ( FROM 12.8% and TO 15.9%) , and THE LEVELS OF WOMEN WHO only had one child WERE ( IN11.3%(1996) and 13.2% (2006))in 1996 and 2006 from 1996 and 2006
AhmadNashran 9 / 13 1  
Oct 30, 2016   #3
Hi washisha, here I have some suggestion for your writing

... juvenile ever born toby women aged 40-44s in Australia in 1981, 1986, 1996, and 2006you can change it: during 25 years, started 1981 to 2006

... more likely to have had three or more children ...


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