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Total percentage of children ever born to older women aged from 40 until 44 years in Australia


kurniarahmi 6 / 5 1  
Jun 18, 2016   #1
The data provides details about the percentage of children born to 40-44 years old women in Australian fo 4 different years in 1981, 1986, 1996, 2006. The table gives information about the proportion of none, one, two, three, and four or more children respectively.

Overall, the figure for women having given birth to two children had the highest number during four years. In meantime, calculated children who were born of women were the lowest at 7.6 percent in 1981.

In 1981, the number of women having no children was 8.5% and in 1986 this percentage rose slightly and reached at 9.7 percent. Furthermore, the women with one child were 7,6% in 1981 and 8.7 percent for 5 years later. Then, the proportion of women of the same age group as 2-4 or more children were much higher (averagely over a quarter). In 1996 and 2006 the percentage for child birth were same or not really changed over one decade. Therefore, the proportion of women who has no children illustrated a significant increase, achived almost 16 percent, beside that for 1 until 2 children 13% and 38% respectively and the figure for women with 3-4 more children decreased over time.




pujakurniawan19 9 / 16 4  
Jun 18, 2016   #2
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The table provides about proportion of children who are born by the 40-44 years old women in Australia. The data is taken from four different years (1981, 1986, 1996, and 2006) and it gives information about the proportion of none, one, two, three, and four or more children respectively.
justivy03 - / 2,366 607  
Jun 23, 2016   #3
Hi Rahmi, below is my take on your analysis.

- in Australian for 4 different years infrom 1981,
- givesalso provides information

- Overall, the figure for women having givengiving birth to two
- duringfor four years.
- In the meantime,
- calculated children who were born of women were the lowest at 7.6 percent in 1981.- I'm not sure what you mean in this part of the analysis.

- rose slightly rose and reached at 9.7 percent.
- Furthermore, the women with one child

There you have it Rahmi, overall, I must say that the analysis is qiet confusing, I believe this is due to the fact that you focused on the figures you presented on the essay and not necessarily on explaining what is presented in the table. For future writing reference, mind the purpose of your writing project, if it's an analysis, the data and the explanation should be prompt and accurate, if it's an essay, it's a totally different approach.
Titus14 5 / 11 1  
Jun 27, 2016   #4
Hi Rahmi,

I found that your essay pretty confusing. I would like to suggest you to read as many model answers as you can first. There are many free resources online that you could access. You'll find out there are some specific rules in academic writings. Note down the sentences that you found useful and try using them in your own writing.


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