The percentage of people in three countries who used the Internet over the course of 10 years

IELTS 2: The Internet users as percentage of population

The given line graph illustrates the percentage of people in three countries who used the Internet over the course 10 years, starting from 1999.

As can been seen from the graph, it is clearly evident that the proportion of Internet users to the USA, Canada, Mexico withnessed an upward trend over the period. Overall, a much larger percentage of Canadians and Americans had access to the Internet compared with Mexican.

In 1999, the proportion of people using the Internet in the USA was roughly 20%. The figures for Canada and Mexico were lower, at aproximately 10% and 5%, respectively. In 2002, Internet usage in both the USA and Canada rose to around 40% of the population, while the figure for Mexico reached over 10 %. A similar trend could be seen in the proportion of Internet users to USA and Canada in 2005 as it increased significantly around 70% of the population, while the figure for Mexico reached just over 25 %.

By 2009, the percentage of Internet users was highest in Canada. Almost 100% of Canadians used the Internet, compared to about 80% of Americans and only 40% of Mexicans.

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The summary overview as provided will be considered a run on sentence, receiving a low TA and GRA score in the process. A clear and coherent paragraph is composed of single idea sentence presentations that allow the reader to individually reflect on the provided information. Each sentence must have only one piece of information to qualify as a properly developed paragraph. The sentence count of a proper paragraph is anywhere from 3-5 sentences.

The trending statement is good but could have been less extended. Remember that there is only one image presented in the report. This indicates a 3 paragraph sentence. Meaning, the trend can and should be merged into the summary overview as a part of the concise presentation for that paragraph. It will help the writer meet the sentence requirement for the summary overview in a score boosting manner.

The third paragraph is over extended. It should have been clear to the writer that the paragraphs need to be presented with at least 3 sentences in them to receive a proper scoring consideration. By compressing the information in the third paragraph, the last paragraph was left with very little reporting development, causing a lower C+C score. There was clearly some information in the previous paragraph that would have been more beneficial to the score had it been presented along with other data in the last paragraph.

While the report is acceptable, the error points that exist in the essay will definitely be a scoring drawback for the exam taker. It will do his score better if he learns to spread out the information across various paragraphs in the future.