The percentages of young unemployed people by age in London and in the rest of England, 1993 to 2012

changes in young adult unemployment rates in England - TASK 1

The given chart compares percentages of young unemployed people by age in London and in the rest of England from 1993 to 2012.

Overall, the adult unemployment rates in London were higher than those in other cities of England in total. Despite some drops, the percentages of English aged 16-24 witnessed uptrends, meanwhile downtrends were seen in the overall young people unemployment rates in England over the above period.

In 1993, around 23% of people aged 23-24 in London were unemployed, nearly 6% higher than that in the rest of England with a rate of 17%. In contrast, the overall young adult unemployment rates seemed much lower when those in London and those in the other English cities came respectively at roughly 14% and 10%. In general, all 4 types of rates went down from 1993 onwards.

The year 2003 witnessed a significant increase in the proportion of unemployed people aged 16-24 in London, while that in the rest of England remained fluctuated until its remarkable rise in 2005. The two proportions reached their peaks at 25% and around 20%, respectively, in 2012. Meanwhile, the rates of young unemployed English in either London or other cities stayed low over the period of 20 years and respectively went down to nearly 9% and 7% in 2012 despite their small rises in the last 4 years.

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