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The Perseid Meteor Shower Will Really Outdo Itself Tonight


azmi23 17 / 28 3  
Aug 12, 2016   #1
It's a summary of Wired's article from (wired.com/2016/08/perseid-meteor-shower-will-really-outdo-tonight/).
don't hesitate to give me some critics, thanks!

Stargazers devotee will be fascinated by once a year phenomenon in August. Perseid meteor shower will show its breathtaking scenery with doubled rate caused by outsized gravitational pull of Jupiter. Head of NASA's Meteorid Environment, Bill Cooke said that there are two aspects which affect gravitational bizarre, the sun and Jupiter despite of other complementary planets. In several times a century, historical record showed the fact of Jupiter orbit which passed debris field that made those dust trails moved closer to earth.

This 124,000 miles per hour outburst is constructed by space chunks of the broken Swift-Tuttle comet that streaks our solar system every 133 years. The flashes stream is the effect of burned chunks that hit the atmosphere, ordinarily called comet.

For those who interested to do stargazing should keep your eyes on wandering the sky in between midnight and dawn. Miserably, people who live in metropolitan city with high light pollution will face an obstacle. But, don't be a fuss because Marshall Space Flight Center will be airing the show.

ilankelo21 36 / 41 22  
Aug 12, 2016   #2
Great, there are some improvements indicated within your essay this time, yet there are still slight mistakes you make and here some corrections I offer.

......breathtaking scenery VIEW...
......historical record showed the fact of Jupiter orbit.....
,........that made those dust trails moved MOVE closer to earth....
,......For those who interested to do IN stargazing


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