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Physical or mental condition? A more crucial factor contributing to the success of a sports player



mnbvcxz 1 / -  
Jul 21, 2020   #1

Some people think that physical strength is important for success in sport, while other point the mentality



Whether physical or mental condition a more crucial factor contributing to the success of a sports player is a heated topic for numerous people at any time. This essay will be discussed which aspect has more advantages in terms of supporting the players the most.

Physical strength might be considered to be one of the must-have requirements for an athlete. Though, it should not be the only thing that decides one can be successful in today's world. The undeniable fact is that if one has more muscles or endurable will win in the game acquires a temporary encounter. In addition, when a candidate faces someone who has a more advantaged body, will be downhearted.

A mental state somehow takes place in deciding how delegate performs on the match. Not in just sports field does the heavy mind affect the winning of a player. If one set their's minds and train hard with the ambition of trouncing their competitor, they are more likely to obtain their desire. With a stable mind, they are more persistent, patient, and prudent compared to the only-muscles ones. Since physical strength can totally be practiced, there is no doubt that with a good mental condition, one can not achieve their body goals. Moreover, mental health impacts the physical one due to its control of emotion and thinking. Having an unstable mind can act as a deterrent when it comes to long term competing.

All things considered, I am in a disposition to the importance of mental strength when it comes to competing because its benefits outnumber the physical's ones.

Holt  Educational Consultant - / 15460  
Jul 21, 2020   #2
Okay, so this is a compare and contrast essay with a personal opinion paragraph. Your prompt paraphrase is inaccurate and your essay is missing a concluding paragraph. You also failed to properly develop the explanation of your personal opinion in the presentation. So all of these errors will instantly add up to a failing score for your presentation.

Next, You mistakenly used a general discussion for the two public points of view in this presentation. The public point of view should use gender neutral pronouns for the presentation. Some gender neutral pronouns are they and their. This is also used a collective group pronouns in this discussion. The neutral / group pronouns are important to the presentation because your GRA score considers your ability to properly address points of view from several perspectives, using the correct pronoun each time. So for the public reasoning paragraphs, use the gender neutral pronouns and for the personal point of view, it will be first person pronoun representation in your writing. Make the gender free reference a part of the topic sentence of each public point of view discussion so that the general discussion aspect will be negated in the presentation, leaving only the proper point of view reference in the paragraph. You will get a better GRA score that way.

For TA scoring considerations, always present a proper paraphrase composed of:
- The topic
- First public point of view
- Second public point of view
- Discussion instruction

For the concluding paraphrase, you should be presenting:
- The topic
- First public point of view supporting statement.
- Second public point of view supporting statement
- Personal point of view restatement
- Closing sentence

An effective personal point of view discussion would include:
- The public point of view you support
- Your personal reason for supporting it
- An example to illustrate your support
- Additional supporting explanation(s)

I hope that you can do another essay that uses the Public and Personal point of view presentation for the discussion format. I would like to see how far more effective your discussion will be once you use the appropriate presentation and also, present a more appropriate prompt paraphrase and concluding summary.
leerose111 2 / 4  
Jul 21, 2020   #3
Maybe your body one is kind of short, and I couldn't clearly see the main point in your passage.


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