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The Pie Chart Compares Common Advantages and Dissadvantages of Firmon Island, According to a survey



Pey28 8 / 13  
Feb 2, 2016   #1
The pie charts compares the most common benefits and drawbacks of Fairmont Island, according to the survey of tourists. Four different aspect for both of views was used to collects the data which measured in percentage. It is noticeable that, the most common merit showed in Fairmont Island's people and scenery with slight different proportion, while the high cost of living was the most demerit for visitors.

First turn to the benefits, the people attitude in Fairmont Island experienced in biggest proportion in two-fifths. Nevertheless, the view of nature in there followed in 37%. In comparison, regarding to this survey, guests thought that accommodation and culture only bring a little advantage in 12% and 11% respectively.

According to the drawbacks figure, living cost in Fairmont Island still too high for tourists, which showed in the highest proportion, at 45%. In addition, whereas entertainment took the second place in the percentage by 30%, the weather condition followed in a fifth of proportion. However, only 5% who thought that food quality is a common bad factor in Fairmont Island.


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angga93 42 / 60  
Feb 2, 2016   #2
Overall, this description is understandable because it differ the explanation into 2 groups.

The pie charts compares (compare) the most common benefits and drawbacks of Fairmont Island

: subject-verb agreement

Four different aspect for both of views was used to collects (to collect) the data which measured in percentage.

: of = unnecessary ;after "to" always back to basic form of verb

the most common merit showed in Fairmont Island's people and scenery with (a) slight different proportion

the people attitude in Fairmont Island experienced in (the) biggest proportion in (which was) two-fifths (of all).

:superlative always need article "the", not preposition

accommodation and culture only bring (brought) a little advantage in 12% and 11% respectively.


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