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[IELTS TASK 2] most common advantages and disadvantages of Bowen Island

nina20201117 1 / -  
Nov 19, 2020   #1

Bowen Island according to a survey of visitors

The pie charts below show the most common advantages and disadvantages of Bowen Island, according to a survey of visitors.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie charts show the percentages of two most common advantages and disadvantages in Bowen island. It is clear that mainly the advantages are the people, and the disadvantages is the high cost of living.

The majority of good things in Bowen is the people, with exactly 42%. The scenery is also a high proportion of the good aspect, at 35%. In shape contrast to these two sectors, culture and good accommodation is less percentages in the chart, with 12% and 11% respectively.

We can see that the high cost of living in Bowen island is half the percentage of most common disadvantages in Bowen area, and second highest is the entertainment, at 25%. The weather and the food quality are a relatively small part of the entire sector, with the figures are 15% and 10% respectively.

luantran 1 / 3  
Nov 20, 2020   #2
I think you should write at least one more paragraph because 3 is not enough for you to describe 2 pie charts
Thank you
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Nov 20, 2020   #3
Unfortunately, you have not written enough words to warrant a passing TA score in this presentation. You have to write at least 150 words within 20 minutes. You only wrote a total of 137 words, 13 words short of the minimum requirement. Appropriate percentage points will be deducted for the missing word count. Which means, your TA score will be failing from the very start. Add to that the conciseness issues of this report and you can truly understand why you will not be able to achieve a passing score. The main problem is that you chose to summarize the information as best as you could. While you were asked to summarize the information, it is also important to include a sentence or two within the paragraphs that shows an analysis of the images provided.All you did was report on the information, without any true analysis of the two images presented.

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