IELTS; Should players be payed highly or not?

IELTS :-
Successful sports professionals can earn a great deal more money than people in other important professions. Some people think this is fully justified, while other think it is unfair. Give your opinion.

Sports have an inevitable part in the growth of a nation. This is importance of sports has been explored years back by Romans and Greeks. Even today its fame is not disrupted. Up to a point I agree with the above statement because sports have a great role to play in the progress of a country. Hence we give weight to sports professionals.

Even United Nation knows the fire power of sports, which motivated them to establish United Nation Organization Sports for Development and Peace (UNOSDP). They use this to bring nations together and also to resolve cold war. Therefore the part of players is significant.

Sometimes winning the game becomes the issue of National pride. So you can imagine the stress upon each player and how much it is important to win. Best example is India - Pakistan match which build an immense pressure upon them.

Sports are a massive bodily activity where you cannot guarantee about anything. A small fracture or an ill health may cost their living. Death is not rare phenomena here, RamanLamba, Al Lucan are the sad part of this truth.

When we are sitting in the comfort of our home, they are playing arduous to win. They have to play in every odd conditions where we don't want to be in out. Physical strain should also be taken in account.

However, many politicians, and sports authorities covered themselves up in sports for getting benefits beyond our imaginations. Common wealth game 2010 is the best illustration for it. This should not be permitted in any case, because our valuable money is going to wrong hands, considering this point I feel it's totally unfair to spend money on without knowing where it goes.

On other hand in my perspective players deserves to get this money because they stake their life on this game.

I agree. Sports professionals are pay way too much, just like our politicians. Now, I know where most of our funding goes to. I just think there should be a cut off to the salaries and I do understand sport professionals can be of great danger. One careless action, can end a person's career. Prime example, Ray Lewis, but it was a miracle that he came back. But, there should be a cap off to paying our skilled professionals.

Thanks sunni
Dumi please review and give your opinion. How many band i can get in this on IELTS level?

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...."acknowledge" is a good key word to use here; it means accept or admit the existence or truth of.


.... have a re-look at your prompt. It talks about the sports professionals who are highly paid and it asks whether it is justifiable. However, you have not mentioned anything about that. Make sure you clearly introduce the prompt to the reader before you finish your introduction. It's very important that you fall into the right track and keep a good alignment with your prompt throughout your essay.

Thank Dumi, but i want to know my stand in IELTS writing?

.... Well dear .... I don't think I am good at giving you a score. However, I can help you with improving your writing so that you can go for a good score. When I give my comments on essays, I generally check whether your essays are aligned with the desired structure. I know for sure that they give you marks for your essay structure, vocabulary, grammar, spellings etc. Generally most of the people are ok with grammar, vocabulary, spelling etc. They only go wrong with essay structure. That's why emphasize so much on it :)

I think I have not given you the outline of this essay structure.