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TOEFL "Playing game is fun when you win?"



hitchhike 14 / 24  
Dec 31, 2009   #1
18. Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Playing a game is fun only when you win. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Some people believe that playing game accompanies with fun just when they win. Others, however, think recreation and playing games are always attached to each others. In my point of view, the latter's group idea is more authentic due to some significant reasons being discussed in this essay. Playing game is an effective activity for encouragement. Playing game almost often has important learning conditions.

Encouragement is such a vivid consequence of games that all men can enjoy from playing. Although some people play a game when they are sure about their triumph, I for one cannot neglect the encouragement effects of playing games. For instance, John, my roommate who is an expert chess player, always wants me to play with him. Frankly, I am novice in this game, yet I have accepted his suggestions all the time because of the fact that by playing chess, I encourage myself to improve my skills. In addition, researchers at the MIT University, who focus on the role of games in the child characteristics, confirm that playing game increases the sense of encouragement up to 15 percent between children.

Furthermore, that learning conditions appearing during each games are another benefits of playing games. As a tangible example, when I play with John, I have this opportunity to learn many things from my competitor. How to make an important decision at the right time and how to manage my facilities to struggle with difficulties are other achievements that I can gain with games.

To wrap it up, playing a game is often fun either you win or not, but the other aspects of game should be considered. Encouragement and learning situations are also the two remarkable features of game. We can learn many things from game. Even if I have not won the John till today, I will play with him to learn all of his strategies and after that invade for the final hit.

yf8651 16 / 27  
Dec 31, 2009   #2
Some people believe that playing game is fun just when they win.

the latter group's idea is more authentic due to some significant reasons being discussed in this essay.

yet I have accepted his suggestions all the time because that by playing chess

researchers at MIT , who focus on the role of games in the child characteristics, confirm that playing game increases the sense of encouragement up to 15 percent between children.

that learning conditions appearing during each games is another benefits of playing games.

To wrap it up, playing a game is often fun either you win or not, but the other aspects of game should be considered.
EF_Kevin 8 / 13053  
Jan 8, 2010   #3
Playing a game is an effective activity for encouragement. Playing a game almost always involves important learning opportunities.

Encouragement is such a vivid consequence of games that all men can enjoy from playing.

It is not good to say "men" when you mean "people." Women should be included, too.

To wrap it up, playing a game is often fun whether you win or not, but the other aspects of game should be considered.

:-)
linhexi 9 / 28  
Jan 10, 2010   #4
You explained your point of view clearly, but I suggest you set some examples to fully sustain your second and third pargraph.
yin 12 / 37  
Jan 16, 2010   #5
In my point of view, the latter group's idea due to some significant reasons which will be discussed in this essay. Playing game is an effective activity for encouragement. Playing game creates important learning conditions.


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