The pleasant and unpleasant tourist's experiences to explore Fairmont lsland (lELTS)

The pie charts show a survey result of the Fairmont lsland's tourists regarding on their most pleasant and unpleasant experiences for visiting the lsland which are measured in percentage. Overall, the friendly locals, the beauty, the culture, and good accomodation services in the Fairmont lsland areas have left some tourists to a good memory in travelling to the lsland, while they have to pay much more money to live there with finding less on the entertainment, feeling unpleasant weather, and tasting poor quality of food.

lt can obviously be seen that 45% of the tourists are more likely to travel the lsland with a low living cost, rather than to build the closeness with the inhabitants in the lsland which is only wanted to 40% of visitors. However, less on the entertainment to 30% of travelers, it could never beat up the value of the spectacular scenery of the lsland which has grabbed 37% of tourists' attention.

Other facts from the data are 20% of travelers feel that the weather of Fairmont lsland is not friendly and 5% of the visitors experience poor quality in food. Nevertheless, there are enjoyable moments for 12% of the travelers to acknowledge varied cultures of the Fairmont lsland and comfortable places for the 11% of travelers to stay during their trip in the lsland.

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