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pluralism in the society



plumedor 1 / -  
Jun 15, 2012   #1
in most modern societies , especially western countries , many communities lives together , different cultures , different origins , and different ways of life , so a pluralist society became a necessity , where a common and neutral law handle the relations between individuals , to avoid the problem of dominant/dominated problem.

we still today facing the problem of dominant community , I'll give an example by the situation of Muslim community in France , and i have to insist on the fact that here we are not addressing the issue of racism neither of human right , but some intellectuals by misunderstanding the notion of secularism define it like an assimilation of other ''new comers'' to the french tradition , it's became a problem when it deals with the manifestation of islam in the society , headscarf , prayers in the street of paris , butchers selling hallah meat ... all of those aspects create a kind of paranoia , like a mew age of Islamic invasion ...

we have to admit that the effort must be done on both sides , the muslim community should adapt its practices so as not to impose her style to other communities , but the rulers must must forge the laws to respect the pluralist society we are trying to build , secularism has never been the fact to erase any aspect of religion from society no , it's allow them all exist without a favoritism of one to an other .

hadi1981 25 / 43  
Jun 15, 2012   #2
inIn most modern societies, especially western countries many peoplelive togetherwith different cultures, different origins and different ways of life religions live together , so a pluralist society became become a necessity. Each country's government is expected to control any of neutralism exceeding people relationships where a common and neutral lawhandlethe relations between individuals to avoid any overstepping from dominated group.

Try to put any comma or other kind of punctuations immediately next to previous word .

Your sentence was too long and need to rearrange it, instead of some grammatical and phrasal mistakes which need to feed back.

You points you have mentioned in your essay were good, but the way was quite wrong

Keep going
dumi 1 / 6793  
Jun 15, 2012   #3
many communities lives together

communities live and community lives :)

n most modern societies , especially western countries , many communities lives together in spite of their different cultures, origins and traditions, so a pluralist society became a necessity

Good suggestion Islam !

we still today facing

We face , We are facing

Nowadays, we are still facing the problem of a dominant community,

Again a good suggestion :)

.... neither of human rights

pay more attention to grammar :)


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