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IELTS Task 2: Power sources to cities and transports that are generated from fossil fuels



akbarmappiare 31 / 445  
Dec 4, 2015   #1
Alternative energy sources that use the natural power of the wind, waves and sun are too expensive and complicated to replace the coal, oil and gas that we use to power our cities and transport.

To what extent do yo agree or disagree with this opinion ?
Give reason for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words.


Power sources to cities and transports that are generated from fossil fuels such as; the coal, oil and gas are converted to renewable energies which use the natural power of the wind, waves and sun. This process, producing the power of the alternative energy, needs a costing so much and is too complex. However, my view is that using the renewable energies give many benefits outweigh drawbacks to citizens such as a reduction of global warming emissions.

First, the process to generate the electric energies from the fossil fuels spend cost extremely and is so complex. This process needs so much budgets since it utilize a new technology which has extremely large capital cost. To illustrate, a country which wants to build solar energy stations spends the budgets highly to supplying devices: photovoltaics (PV), tracking systems, loads, and storage integration, grid monitors, and power electronics. After that, the process to produce the electric energies is extreme complex because the renewable energies often rely on weathers such as wind turbines which need the wind to turn blades.

However, I have a perspective that budgets to this process is unbalanced with many benefits which will be gained by the citizens. A increasing the supply of the renewable energy will allow the citizens to reduce the global warming emissions significantly. Based on research of Department of Energy's National in America, a 2009 UCS analysis finds that a 25 percent of renewable electricity standard will lower emissions by 277 million metric tons annually in 2025. In addition, facilities to produce renewable energy generally require less maintenance than the fossil fuels. This energy use the natural and available resource so that it reduces the costs of operation. For example, solar collectors need the sunshine to collect heat and make the electricity.

In conclusion, I fully disagree that the cost of using fossil fuels is so expensive. The renewable energy highly contributes the citizens' activities. I guess that the government in all countries should begin to consider using it.

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vangiespen - / 4077  
Dec 4, 2015   #2
Akbara, your line of reasoning in sthis essay is confused. Your first line in your thesis paragraph states that:

Power sources to cities and transports that are generated from fossil fuels such as; the coal, oil and gas are converted to renewable energies which use the natural power of the wind, waves and sun.

However, the power sources from fossil fuels cannot be converted to a renewable energy resource as these energy sources are known as non-renewable and therefore, cannot be discussed in relation to converting the renewable energy sources that you mentioned. These are also not necessary to power up the renewable energy sources as these are designed to power themselves using the sun, wind, and rain power. Therefore, your opening paragraph is not correct. I suggest that you do more research into the difference between the two power sources so you can make a more informed thesis statement.

That said, your line of reasoning about the renewable power sources being more expensive at the start, becoming more cost effective and cheaper over time is excellent. You just need to learn to express yourself in more coherent English. At this point, your discussion is really hard to follow and seems to confuse, rather than inform the reader. I believe that , just like the renewable energy sources, you should improve over time, through constant practice and English usage.
OP akbarmappiare 31 / 445  
Dec 5, 2015   #3
I'm so sorry. I make a mistake in the last paragraph. "Not Fossil fuels, but renewable energy"

In conclusion, I fully disagree that the cost of using the renewable energy is so expensive. It highly contributes the citizens' activities. I guess that the government in all countries should begin to consider using it.
pikul 23 / 26  
Dec 5, 2015   #4
First, the process to generate the electric energies from the fossil fuels spend cost extremely and is so complex. SPENDS HIGHLY COST and IS EXTREMELY COMPLEX. This process needs so much budgets LOTS OF BUDGETS since it utilize UTILIZES a new technology which has ...


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