The price of 800 grams of four kinds of bread in a particular European country

Bread price history

The line graph illustrates the price of 800 grams of four kinds of bread in a particular European national over the period 2001-2005

Looking at the graph, it is immediately obvious that the price of wholegrain stay underchanged while the brown and white bread increased sharply and the rye bread rase slowly over the period

In 2001, the price of wholegrain was highest at 0.8 euros for 800 grams. There was a reach the highest point of 1.8 euros in 2002 then went down significantly to 0.8 euros in 2005. The rye bread underwent a slow rise from 0.6 to 0.7 euros over the period 2001-2005.

It is noticeable that the white and brown bread only cost 0.6 euros each in 2001.The brown bread rase shaply from 0.6 euros in 2001 until surpass the price of wholegrain in 2002 then becam highest at 1.6 euros in 2005. There was a sustainable climb in white bread to 1.3 in 2005.

@Sangdoan
I think you should also provide the image so that it would be easier to give feedbacks

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@Thangnguyen315
Thank you for your feedback
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@Sangdoan
Hello there!

Welcome to the forum.

Firstly, try to use words that would help you compress the language and your articulation in general. It is quite noticeable how there were instances wherein you should have opted to change up the formatting in order for you to save up space. Remember that, in writing interpretative and analytical content, it is critical that you are able to maximize the space you have as you are working with smaller chunks of text.

Having said that, observe these revisions I will make:

There was a reach the highest point of was 1.8 euros ...

Notice how a small change like that can simplify your language even more so.

Try incorporating similar techniques in the process.

I have also observed how you had small mistakes in terms of grammatical composition.

Observe the following changes:

The brown bread rase shaply rose from ... until it surpassed the price of wholegrain in 2002 then before becam becoming the highest at 1.6 euros in by 2005.

Review your fundamental grammatical rules.

Best of luck in your writing as always!