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IELTS T2: Is prison the best punishment for criminals?


m7mdbsheer 6 / 7 1  
Nov 26, 2016   #1
Prison is the best punishment for criminals, to what extent do you agree?

It is largely argued that the most effective way to punish offenders is putting them in jails. I completely agree with this statement.

In my opinion, prison is the best sort of punishment for a number of reasons. First, by putting law-breakers in the prison we ensure the safety of our society. What this means is that criminal will not be able to commit further crimes if they are kept in jails. Secondly, in custody prisoners are prepared to be better citizens when they are released. For example, a huge number of prisons apply the rehabilitation programme, in which prisoners receive education and learn some valuable life skills. Finally, long prison sentences can deter offenders from re-offending crimes again. Because they will realise the value of freedom, therefore, they will think again before breaking the law in the future.

The alternatives to imprisonment would be much less effective. One option would be to apply fines as punishment for crimes. The downside of this method is that some wealthier might deliberately commit offences when they feel they can easily afford the price. Another option would be to require offenders to do community service. Although this way of punishment might be considered to be beneficial for society, but it also could be downright risky. Because we cannot trust the behaviours of not rehabilitated criminals, thus, by doing this we endanger the community.

In conclusion, I believe that the best punishment for criminals is to imprison them, and that all other alternatives are unreliable.

Holt [Contributor] - / 7,660 1998  
Nov 26, 2016   #2
Mohammed, please review your summary overview. It is going to get a failing mark in an actual test because of the extreme shortness of your summary. The standard overview is composed of 3 sentences at a minimum. You have only one sentence, which is definitely in violation of the rules. The highest score you can get in terms of task accuracy would most likely be a 4. Keep in mind that you have to paraphrase the original prompt and as such, you have the opportunity to express the prompt in an original manner, within the minimum sentence requirement. Don't waste your chance to get a high score in the first part of the test. Make sure you deliver on the paraphrased prompt requirement.

In relation to that, you have also presented the same problem with your conclusion. There is no proper paragraph development. Instead, you have a single sentence that does not properly recap the essay prompt, your discussion, and closing statement. While you have the possibility of scoring a 5 in the remaining sections of the test, the problem with your opening statement and closing statement is enough to pull down your final score.

Review the other essays here and look at how it was developed. Don't take shortcuts. Be as thorough as you can in the opening and closing statement because any mistakes in those areas will have a grave effect on your final score.
Dioba 68 / 107 7  
Nov 27, 2016   #3
HI,below through my advice for you.
1. Always bare in your mind
- Introduction (including paraphrase the question your own word a, overview, and also give personal
statement
). because your introduction sentence too short.
- Body 1 ( explore more about why you agree )
- Body 2 ( explain more about the background why you disagree )
2. In my viewpoint, better if you use one idea paragraph, so you can develop you idea and it more flexible to add some essential information.

3. However , The alternatives to imprisonment ...


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