There is a problem on the road outside your house. Write a letter to your local councillor.

Dear Mr.Smith,
I am writing to express my disappointment regarding the poor condition of Rose street in Ha Noi city.
My name is Phuong, whose house is located at number 10 on this street.
Recently, the increasing population in the area has led to a significant in various types of vehicles, resulting in rapid deterioration of the road. There are potholes in the middle of the road, which are causing people to fall.
Consequently, unfortunately, accidents have occurred.
I respectfully request that the road on Rose street might be repaired as soon as possible. Regardless of the delay, I expect the council to place some warning signs to alert people about the dangers of crossing the road.
I, along with other residents on the street, strongly hope that the matter will be resolved promptly to ensure safety.
I am looking forward to hearing from you soon.
Yours faithfully,
Lam

You need to write a longer letter for this task 1 essay. You only have 149 words. Try to aim for 175 - 200 words. That way you will have a fully developed letter for your local councilor to consider. Your opening statement is not a very good introduction. You should remember to use paragraphs that have at least 3 sentences each. You do not follow the task presentation format as required. The sentences are not well developed or misleading in representation. For example:


Since portholes are in the middle of the road, it should be causing cars to fall into the holes, not people. People can only fall into holes on the sidewalk, where people are expected to be in the street.


This idea is not developed at all in the presentation.

The overall letter is just not well brain stormed and written. It is not the kind of task 1 letter that would receive a passing score. Specially since it is also under the minimum word count at 149 words only.