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How to produce bricks for building purpose


Reza_Hidayat 13 / 18 1  
Apr 27, 2017   #1

the instruction - how bricks are produced



The diagram illustrates information regarding how to produce brick for building purpose. Overall, the process involves six automatic steps before the brick is ready to deliver. Furthermore, it is starting from digging clay and culminating in brick packaging.

In the beginning of the process, clay is dug as the main raw material. After that, the clay is sifted by putting on metal grid then it is distributed by roller. Next, the clay has to be mixed with sand and water before it is shaped into many peaces of bricks by wire cutter or mould.

The next step is dying oven, those bricks will be put in an oven. After that, those will pass three stages with different temperature. It will face moderate temperature firstly after that it moves to high temperature. Before the bricks are packaged, it has to enter to cooling chamber for 48-72 hours. Ultimately, the bricks are ready to deliver for building industry.




akbarmappiare 31 / 469 275  
Apr 29, 2017   #2
Hi Reza...
Actually, your writing is a good job, but I will offer you a few improvements for finalizing this. It's better if you make the brick plural. I meant you write "to produce Bricks" because it obviously seems that this process produces many bricks. Following this, you got confused about using active and passive sentences. There was a passive sentence, but you write in the active sentence. IT IS STARTED FROM. Ensure yourself that what you wrote is what you mind.

I suggest you emphasize that there are two processes for forming bricks. It is essential for making the imperative timing in this manufacturing. After that, you can develop your second body paragraph. You can say that those bricks are put in the dying over for reducing the water in them. I think you should do it for adding words because the number of your words is close to the edge of the requirement. You are also supposed to mention detail information about the degree of temperature in those three steps.

Hopefully, those can help you to improve your skill.
GOOD LUCK


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