This is one of your best argued essays. Your reasons are valid and come from everyday experiences and observations. This tells the me, as the reviewer that you have developed your English comprehension skills. However, developed comprehension skills don't always come with good grammar. That comes later on as you become more comfortable with the English language. That is also why I have listed corrected parts of your essay for you to insert into your current essay. Use it as a review guide whenever you can :-)
argue that perfect dress is prominent for staffs , others argue that
I believe that THE company will progress considerably when
workers ARE both well-groomed and HAVE THE skill to work.
In terms OF DRESSING SMARTLY ,
appearance is one of THE ways
and potentially impact how businesses perform
size up THE capability of other professionalS BASED UPON what they WORE AT the first meeting.
As an obvious instance
conducts A prominent presentation
in front of clients which will be invited to cooperate,
- I'm not quite sure what you mean here. Please clarify.
him AS incapable as
in order to decrease minimally valuation of clients to play along. All in all,
determines the level of trust in a business.
performance DETERMINES A company's success.
will GREATLY INFLUENCE
FOR EXAMPLE, Google - proper nouns always use a capital letter
IS ONE OF THE ... WORLD .
they HAVE A TIGHT RECRUITMENT PROCESS IN ORDER to find the qualified human resources SO THAT THE COMPANY WILL HAVE A GREAT COMPOSITION OF EMPLOYEES.
having ability to keep up appearances
be able to
decrease the level of belief.
if result becomes A priority, it should be supported by AN attractive EMPLOYEE appearance.